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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
I keep sending you this letter hoping it'll make you feel better just to comfort your broken heart that was broken from the start and I know as far as our love goes I knew you'd do me wrong now everybody knows And it's the first day that my pillows dry the first night that I didn't cry I even got myself dressed on my own I keep telling myself I'm over you but I can't let myself find someone new When I think about those times I can stand on my own i'm back on my feet I've finally got your memories beat and I can tell myself to get on with my dreams 'cos i've stitched up all my broken seams and I had a feeling as far as out love goes you'd do me wrong now everybody knows And it's the first day that my pillows dry the first night that I didn't cry I even got myself dressed on my own I keep telling myself I'm over you but I can't let myself find someone new When I think about those times and now I know i'm have to let you go before my heart turns gray and theres nothing left to say And it's the first day that my pillows dry the first night that I didn't cry I even got myself dressed on my own I keep telling myself I'm over you but I can't let myself find someone new When I think about those times |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hi hunnie, I’m sorry it’s been awhile since I’ve posted on your poems. I have been reading them but either I don’t have even a second to post or everything I want to say has been said… ok, that’s a pitiful excuse! I should kick myself. I really enjoyed this piece, the first and third stanzas are wonderfully written. The setup reminds me of song lyrics, I’m not sure if you had that in mind? Anyway, as I said, I really liked the first stanza, something about it draws you in to read more and more of the poem, beautiful beginning. Thanks for sharing this poem, I hope to be able to read/comment on more of your work. ~Stargal "The rising morning can't insure that we shall end the day; For death stands ready at the door to snatch our lives away" |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
PS- How have you been? PPS- Usually I don't care for the same thing said over and over but it just fit in this  ~Stargal "The rising morning can't insure that we shall end the day; For death stands ready at the door to snatch our lives away" @-->--- |
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Abbeon Member
since 2006-11-30
Posts 228Curiousity, and wonder |
The pain of lose in itself is a tragady, but i am glad to hear that you are on the mend. i loved your work as always for my favorite poet i doubt anything you write would be less then amazing. Hugs from Abbeon The world behind these thoughtful eyes, caution may seem crazy. |
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Derek Junior Member
since 2007-10-20
Posts 38New Hampshire, USA |
I really like that poem, alot. one of the best Ive read |
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Assassin_of_Verse Member
since 2007-10-23
Posts 330that So Cal |
Some say that a picture's worth a thousand words. I say this poem's worth a thousand pictures (if not more). The more you know, the more you know you don't know. -Socrates |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Stargal- Wow I haven't seen your name in a long time it is good to see you back. I hope to read a little something soon from you. I am doing ok not too bad I suppose. Beckie- Sorry I missed seeing you, I will see you soon though.. one day. Thank you for your insightful words Derek- Thanks for the reply it was really nice to hear for once  Assassin_of_Verse- Wow that was a really cool reply I never thought of it that way. thank you so much ~Krysti |
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Shake Junior Member
since 2006-11-17
Posts 40 |
Yay! Another from Hunnie! This was really good! Do you sing in a band or just write the songs? I liked this one, it'd sound really good with the right bass and a good drum roll. The only thing I didnt like is how you just threw together the couplets, it had the ABAB scheme to it, but other than that it was awesome!!!! Gods and Demons, |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
it was cool it was awsome and i loved how everyone else put it especially the thousand pictures comment, you write wonderfully and i can't wait for more |
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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
Beautiful words hunnie I haven't been here in a while, and i'm glad that i choose to read this one!! So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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prettypinkrebel Member
since 2007-11-07
Posts 104 |
Hunnie, you ALWAYS have such great work and htis one was Not a disappointment. you have MUcho talent and I love reading every one of your peices you are an amazing writwer love && hugz Adreanna Leigh Aka Rebel Life is normally a broken road....so look ahead for the cracks! |
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fromme2U Member
since 2007-11-09
Posts 257 |
this was good,,it could be a song |
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charlie18 New Member
since 2007-11-14
Posts 8Washington, United States |
This was a really. I could feel your pain. I hope to write this good someday. |
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