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Teen Poetry #8

Cant stop these tears

Sexy_Tator_Tot
Junior Member

since 2007-08-31

Posts 42
Arkansas

0 posted 2007-09-28 12:34 PM

All I ever wanted was you,
All I ever needed to hold,
Everything I felt was you,
Everything I saw,
When I would cry,
You'd wipe the tears,
When I would sulk,
You'd make me laugh,
Why have you gone and left me?
Why can't I stop these tears?
Every time you'd leave,
I'd cry a little bit more,
Every song I hear,
I miss a little bit more,
What does she have?
Besides a smile and a hug,
And that she's closer to you,
And that she can talk,
While I try to sleep,
But otherwise,
I loved you more,
And now while you
Can't stop watching her,
I can't stop these tears

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-09-28 11:18 PM

And now while you
Can't stop watching her,
I can't stop these tears ~

Wow Mia you are amazing this was amazing I loved it every word I think I can relate to every line...
Krysti

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

2 posted 2007-10-03 12:22 PM

over all i liked the poem but it sounded a bit rough like it wasn't quite finished but more that it was still in the rough stage sorry

LOSTinTHISworld
Member

since 2003-06-01

Posts 94
canada

3 posted 2007-10-03 05:46 PM

its beautiful

MegMeg
Member

since 2007-05-14

Posts 85
Virginia

4 posted 2007-10-03 07:43 PM

aww. i'm sorry, i can't relate, i've never felt that deeply for someone.. i hope it gets better. hang in there

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