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Teen Poetry #8

forbidden love

pip_man
Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 70
Canada

0 posted 2007-09-05 12:57 PM

I sit at my desk for hours
I don't know what to say
The thoughts of you race through my head
Then simply float away.

My heart is full of anguish
You are killing me inside
I think of you both day and night
But these thoughts, I have to hide.

I am not suppose to feel this way
It is wrong, that I know
But you tripped me and I fell for you
Now I can not let you go.

I sit in a room of darkness
The light, I can not see
But maybe someday the light will turn on
And it can be just you and me.

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace."
Jimi Hendrix

forever*wishing
Member

since 2006-05-29

Posts 178
where my heart is

1 posted 2007-09-05 04:25 PM

wow, i really liked that...
the ending was really cool,
nice flow

loved it
i dont really know of anything that was
wrong with it,so ya, that's my honest
opinion =)

broken_smile1469
Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 104

2 posted 2007-09-05 05:49 PM

WOW I really loved this poem, I can relate to it soo much and it is written beautifully

"in a world of cheerios, be a fruit loop"

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

3 posted 2007-09-06 08:56 PM

amazin mr. pip!!

i liked it.
this poem was so orderly, concise, and easy to read. it made me happy iono why haha. !~ but i liked that i flowed so well.

it was great. :]

*adds to library*

~missy
afraid of my feelings and falling too deep, but i had to let go of the pain let it rain down on me

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2007-09-10 03:19 PM

Wow, another one of your poems... They all amaze me. Very sweet.
Krysti

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