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broken_smile1469
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0 posted 2007-09-02 03:09 AM



Its really unexplainable
This feeling of which feels
Like a rose drenched with pouring rain
Pain is what it heals

It never lets me down
Although I hate to admit
I think some call it love
And cant get enough of it

But I wish it would go away
Yet never leave my heart
Its hard to deal with
I knew this from the start

When you came into my life
You put a spell on me
You took hold of my heart
Unlocked it, stole the key

Which I have hid for so long
For no one to find
Afraid of what might happen
If I crossed that line

How can I give my heart to someone
Who could never understand
All the pain that I have been though
All the trouble I have had

With guys who I can’t trust
Those who only lie
Cheat steal and fight
Who don’t care if I die

So maybe now you understand
Why I am so confused
I’m not used to being cared about
The way I am by you

"in a world of cheerios, be a fruit loop"

© Copyright 2007 Miranda Nelson - All Rights Reserved
ResLife286
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since 2007-09-02
Posts 7
Canada
1 posted 2007-09-02 06:39 PM


WOW... thats just breath taking, makes sense of alot of things for me, me being a nice guy and all.
rebel~angel
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since 2006-06-20
Posts 71
Iowa USA
2 posted 2007-09-03 01:51 PM


wow...I know some people who need to read stuff like this...that was amazing, and yeah, breathtaking and all...

Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming.
-Elizabeth Haydon, Requiem for the Sun

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062
In Love <3
3 posted 2007-09-03 04:02 PM


incredible. i loved it! library piece!

-Red

ps in one book i read miranda meant "in the coils of the snake" pretty much the goblin king's wife. long story short- i love your name.

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
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In Love <3
4 posted 2007-09-03 04:07 PM


just wanted to say sorry for my erratic-ness. i read back over my comment an di sound like a fruit loop. lol

-Red

broken_smile1469
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since 2006-07-02
Posts 104

5 posted 2007-09-03 05:13 PM


Thanks for all the comments, and thats cool about my name, I never knew that hehe
well thanks again

"in a world of cheerios, be a fruit loop"

Sexy_Tator_Tot
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since 2007-08-31
Posts 42
Arkansas
6 posted 2007-09-04 12:26 PM


Wow, this is really good. I wish I could write something like that. You say a lot in the first few words...Cant wait to read more!
hunnie_girl
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since 2006-06-18
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7 posted 2007-09-09 11:20 PM


wow this was really good I loved it
Krysti

surf_painter
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8 posted 2007-09-10 12:26 PM


this was amazing and i loved how it just flowed so well nice rhymning scheme
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