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Clockwork_Orange
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0 posted 2007-08-26 01:34 PM



im all tapped out
and against the wall
and i can honestly say say
that i think im ready for the fall
and the gun feels so heavy
as i think about my past
of how theres so many memories
that i wish i didnt have

ambulance take me away
from the hurt and the pain
because i cant stand to live this way
you know i'll die

this wasnt a suicide
its just a path away from life
and im so glad
that ive found my way

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hunnie_girl
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1 posted 2007-08-26 01:38 PM


Have you found your way CO? I really did like this poem the flow was good.
Krysti

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

pen&paper
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2 posted 2007-08-26 03:04 PM


"ambulance take me away
from the hurt and the pain
because i cant stand to live this way
you know i'll die"

Loved this! It's probably one of my faves by you. Great Write!

Rerra

BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
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3 posted 2007-09-02 04:06 PM


"and i can honestly say say
that i think im ready for the fall
and the gun feels so heavy
as i think about my past"

I really liked these two lines Nice write here...and i hope that that is not going to be the way you end up chosing

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

rebel~angel
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since 2006-06-20
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Iowa USA
4 posted 2007-09-03 01:45 PM


That was amazing... I loved it.

I wish I could write like that...

Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming.
-Elizabeth Haydon, Requiem for the Sun

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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5 posted 2007-09-03 04:05 PM


if it's too personal- then it's okay if you don't want to answer, but i'm wondering what's your drive, or pain, what ever is the source behind your . . . . writes.

-Red

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

Clockwork_Orange
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Space Camp, IN
6 posted 2007-09-08 11:14 PM


inspiration comes in many shapes and forms, but latley the burn of lonlyness.
surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10
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7 posted 2007-09-11 03:24 PM


it was so sad and good and amazing and the flow was wonderful it was a beautiful job. well done
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