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buttercupbaby
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outside in the rain

0 posted 2007-08-25 01:59 AM


i know its split up kind of weird, it seems kind of sing-songish to me, but i hope yall like it

i know you're with her, but i just need to know
for sure, did you really never feel for me as more?cause even though you let me go..

baby, even jus the sight,
of you walking down the road
makes me wonder if i can make it through the night,
yea let me tell you , my heart is sold
but im not alright, and i cant make it through,
i think you should know i cant live without you

you told me goodbye, an i wanted to believe by your eyes
that it was hard for you to do, and your words were just a disguise

baby, even just the sight
of you walking down the road
makes me wonder if i can make it through the night
yea let me tell you, my heart is simply sold
but im not alright, and i cant make it through
i think you should know i'll just die without you

I know you found a knew love, and she fufills all your dreams
but i can give you more, to your heart its just unseen

cause baby, even just the sight
of you walking down the road
makes me wonder if i can make it through the night
yea let me tell you, my heart is clearly sold
but im not alright, and i cant make it through
i think you should know im torn up without you

what right did she ever have, to take you away
cause for so long, you were only mine, every single day
i don't know how it happened, or what made you fall out of love
an i cant find a good enough reason, cause your still making my heart sing octaves
and its tearing me apart, every time you walk by
i honestly could just sit right down, crumble and cry

because forever baby, just your sight
keeps me together, makes everything okay
and i don't know if i'll make it through another night
not knowing if you dont care one bit, when i've given my heart away
but until i know for sure, im not alright, and i cant make it through
cause i'm absolutely breaking without you


~missy
afraid of my feelings and falling too deep, but i had to let go of the pain let it rain down on me

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hunnie_girl
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1 posted 2007-08-25 11:50 AM


wow this was so sad. I really liked the feeling in this poem too. sounded like a song to me great write
Krysti

BrittanyJ
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Come find me?
2 posted 2007-08-25 04:25 PM


"but until i know for sure, im not alright, and i cant make it through
cause i'm absolutely breaking without you"

This is so sad I loved it. Very emotional

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

buttercupbaby
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since 2006-05-03
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outside in the rain
3 posted 2007-08-25 08:27 PM


thanks for the replies yall. :]

i'm glad you both liked it.

~missy
afraid of my feelings and falling too deep, but i had to let go of the pain let it rain down on me

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