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rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

0 posted 2007-08-21 12:58 PM

I'm hurting and I don’t know how to make it stop.
I don’t know what went wrong
I followed all directions. Where did I get lost?
Where has my purpose gone?

I’m so confused about what I should know.
Not even sure that I have a right to be hurtin’
Compared to others, I’m not even low.
It’s my game, but I’ve forgotten how to win.

Emotions are really tearing me to pieces
But I am sick and tired of know understanding
, Of not knowing what any of this means.
I took off for flight and fell on the landing.

I hurt so badly and I don’t know why
It leaves me drained and empty of feeling
I can’t tell the truth from all of my lies.
I don’t know how to give up, without kneeling.

I want to let myself out, maybe get a clue.
But the sooner I get close, it just hurts my heart.
I’m scared what I fear is gonna come true.
Destroyed inside, I want to heal at least in part

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-08-21 02:45 PM

Rhia, this had so much emotion in it. One of my fav. from you.
Krysti

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

jayjara
Member

since 2007-05-02

Posts 90
Florida

2 posted 2007-08-21 05:37 PM

Nice...the 1st 2 stanzas didn't really capture me..but I'm glad I read the rest of the poem because the last stanzas were original and raw with emotion.

Maybe the 1st 2 stanzas you can elaborate with sum concrete detail on the directions and the confusion and scratch the questions you ask (personally i think it throws the flow off)

kool

-J

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

3 posted 2007-08-21 10:51 PM

"I want to let myself out, maybe get a clue.
But the sooner I get close, it just hurts my heart.
I’m scared what I fear is gonna come true.
Destroyed inside, I want to heal at least in part"

This is beautiful!! The emotion ran so deep, and the flow was wonderful as well. All around an amazing write

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

Leanne <3
Member

since 2007-08-25

Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia

4 posted 2007-08-26 08:09 AM

this expresses so much emotion.

i really loved reading it!

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