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littlefairy
Member

since 2007-08-06

Posts 51
New York

0 posted 2007-08-12 01:41 PM

If I could lay in your arms,
Every day for the rest of my life,
I’d die with a smile on my face,
And a peaceful beating in my heart,
There’s no one who can make me,
Feel like you do,
No one gives me that smile,
That you make lit up my face,
Every time you say my name,

There’s no other,
Whose name would fit,
So perfectly with mine,
Like yours does,
When I look in the mirror,
And I think of you,
I smile because I know,
Your calling me yours,
And that you’ve claimed me and not someone else,

I want to be that old woman,
That you come home to at night,
With that grin on your face,
When your fifty five,
Because you just can’t wait to feel her kiss,
Touch your lips,
For no matter how old you are,
You still love her very touch,

I want to be that young girl,
Who you look at even after her tears,
Left mascara under her eyes,
And thought that she was the one who you always want to be with,
Because even with her red nose and puffy eyes,
You thought she was the best looking girl,
You’ve ever seen,

I want to be the one,
Who you come running to,
So that you can swing me around,
And give me a huge kiss,
I want to be that woman,
Who only you see the beauty in,
And I want to be that person,
Where you get to be enough
And who wants nothing more.

I’m good during the day. But at night I wait.I wait for the one who’ll never return.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

1 posted 2007-08-12 03:32 PM

Wow, this is so sweet I know exactly what you are saying too. I really love this poem.
Krysti

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

2 posted 2007-08-14 10:15 PM

Oh wow...i felt the emotion behind this. I love it

And there are so many people who know that feeling...

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

forever*wishing
Member

since 2006-05-29

Posts 178
where my heart is

3 posted 2007-08-14 11:26 PM

thats such a sweet poem! i love it = )

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

4 posted 2007-08-28 08:34 PM

sweet poem but it doesn't seem to flow from paragraph to paragraph

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

5 posted 2007-09-01 05:20 PM

I like the style the way its written and that you wrote it without a rhyming scheme. Sometimes to me, having to write within a rhyme scheme and express emotions can be really hard because there are rules and a way it needs to be. But that is just me. I liked this poem, and I totally understand.

That you make lit up my face,

Here , it might flow better

that lights up my face.
Because its kind of reduntant , that you.

I really like this poem.
RhIa

ResLife286
New Member

since 2007-09-02

Posts 7
Canada

6 posted 2007-09-02 06:49 PM

Thats a sweet poem, he must be lucky , and about that ryming scheme, I always say that theirs no need for rymes when it comes from the heart

Sexy_Tator_Tot
Junior Member

since 2007-08-31

Posts 42
Arkansas

7 posted 2007-09-07 12:24 PM

I like the way it flows and that it doesnt rhyme. It makes it unique in my perspective. I really like it though.

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