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Teen Poetry #8

strength

Alex pb
Junior Member

since 2007-07-25

Posts 22
Arizona

0 posted 2007-08-11 10:43 PM

a characteristic many beings hold,
for it is the most important

love and truth will become a painful path...
for it is strength thats keeps life going

Substantial life goals accomplished
for cupids arrow may bring two hearts together or fracture it once more

strength, the shield of the heart,
blocking the poisonous arrows,

And letting the pure in,
for strength is knowledge

Knowing what to let in,
or out,

By knowledge is a strong force
a force named friendship

Backed up by people of love
the guard is strong,

this characteristic of strength...
unlock it...

for it resides in all beings...

kasey191
Junior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 33
Australia

1 posted 2007-08-16 01:11 AM

I like the message in the poem, the layout is kind of ..messy?Im not sure. I like it though

musicgirl3698
New Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 4

2 posted 2007-08-16 09:11 AM

I dunno, I like that poem as it is. I think that the layout speaks to the audience... I believe that the message of the poem speaks with the layout.

good job, I really enjoed it.

haiXraab
Junior Member

since 2007-07-29

Posts 10

3 posted 2007-08-16 06:36 PM

awe,i rmember this! you wrote it for me a while ago! and i still read it...for inspiration!

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

4 posted 2007-08-28 08:41 PM

i'm not sure but i think the last line should be resides in us all instead of in each being because the line right now doesn't seem to flow but i do like it as a poem and the idea behind it

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