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WaterFairy103
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since 2006-05-31
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0 posted 2007-07-27 12:07 PM


It’s a wonder you can’t see the blood
Running from the wounds in my heart.
It’s amazing that there isn’t a scar
From the words you so venomously impart.
I wish I knew how to make you see
Exactly what you do to me.

Sixteen is old enough to know
Those words spoken in anger aren’t true.
But I still think, just two years,
I get out of here, I get away from you.
I hate it when we fight all night,
And in the shower next morning, I start to cry.

There’s a hurt little girl,
I keep her hidden deep inside.
Maybe you’ll catch a glimpse of her,
If you shut your mouth and open your eyes.

I know a mother’s love is strong,
And I know it lasts forever.
But why am I feeling so suddenly awkward,
When we’re alone together?
My friends tell me that it’s okay,
But they don’t know you, do they?

You roll your eyes when I talk about him,
And say how much I love him.
You say scathing things that slice oh so deep,
But I keep the hurts and aches hidden.
I go to my room, listen to music too loud,
So you can’t hear as my hurt slowly leaks out.

The little girl is so scared,
The one I hide inside.
There’s only one way to help her,
Shut your mouth and open your eyes.

It’s a sad, terrible thing
When a girl yearns to run away.
When she’d rather walk around in the dark,
Than be at home where it should be safe.
I need you, Mom, need you to decide,
To shut your mouth and open your eyes.

I'm the literary equivalent of a Big Mac and Fries.
- Stephen King

© Copyright 2007 Kelsey Dianne - All Rights Reserved
Alex pb
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since 2007-07-25
Posts 22
Arizona
1 posted 2007-07-27 12:43 PM


wow....
im speechless... great writing...

i hope to read more soon

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN
2 posted 2007-07-27 12:44 PM


you know im always here, you know how to contact me.    this was an incredible work. very sad and emotional. i like that. but just think that things can hurt. but so much beaty can show through from these moments. and i think this captures some of that beauty.
surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10
Posts 434
Canada
3 posted 2007-07-27 10:03 AM


oh wow  i'm speechless for any better word
it was a great poem full of emotion

BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
Posts 461
Come find me?
4 posted 2007-07-27 10:26 AM


"The little girl is so scared,
The one I hide inside.
There’s only one way to help her,
Shut your mouth and open your eyes"

I loved this, and i'm here too, because i've been there. Just e-mail me at whodaho@yahoo.com if you ever wanna talk

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

StormyB
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since 2007-07-18
Posts 42
Ohio Usa
5 posted 2007-07-27 05:16 PM


Excellent work!
If only it were as easy to communicate as it is to write*

hunnie_girl
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since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567
Canada
6 posted 2007-07-27 08:17 PM


"The little girl is so scared,
The one I hide inside.
There’s only one way to help her,
Shut your mouth and open your eyes"

This is so sad, But I can relate to this so well. I hope things get better. what an ending so strong, so perfect
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Leanne <3
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since 2007-08-25
Posts 216
N.S.W, Australia
7 posted 2007-08-25 05:48 AM


i really loved this, u wrote it with such perfection and honesty
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