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RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2007-07-14 12:07 PM

I’ve seen the world and had a hard life
But it’s not my problem that you can’t find a wife
Stop taking your lame problems out on us
And if you can’t do that, stand in front of a bus
I’m not perfect and we all know I’m not fat
But who the hell are you to treat me like that?

Who are you to tell me that I can’t write?
Look at your own poems; you just might die in fright
So take your lame excuses and walk out this door
Because I ain’t putting up with you anymore

I may be just some chick with an attitude
But I deserve to be shown some gratitude
You mess with me once and you just look like a fool
You mess with me again and you’re just a tool

So turn around and take a step down
I’m the one who wears this crown
So take some advice and don’t mess with me
Cause if you do it again, I’ll squash you like a flea.

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

1 posted 2007-07-14 12:32 PM

Wow, you're my hero. I love this, it completely rocks!

I'm the literary equivalent of a Big Mac and Fries.
- Stephen King

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

2 posted 2007-07-14 03:33 AM

Thanx Waterfairy.. I'm not up for other peoples lame excuse of criticism so here's me having my say..

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
Senior Member

since 2007-06-11

Posts 1062
In Love <3

3 posted 2007-07-14 10:42 AM

wow, it ryhmes really well, and even though it has an angry feel i found it very funny. your use of graphics it what made me think it funny- overall pretty nice.

-Red

ps you aussies rock!

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

4 posted 2007-07-14 10:44 AM

I thought it was awesome

I really liked the first two lines! They were my favorite.

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

5 posted 2007-07-14 11:14 AM

i think this was a great piece of writing. i love the flow of not only rythm but also of emotion. it wass great and i love it.

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

6 posted 2007-07-14 09:01 PM

Thanx Guys.. So Good To Be Back.. Clockwork Orange.. I think your a great guy and i know that u'll always luv my work and i'l always luv urs.. Mwah...

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

7 posted 2007-07-17 07:55 PM

oh I am sooooo happy you are back. missed reading your poems it's been so lonley without you.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

8 posted 2007-07-18 01:59 AM

If you not wanting to put up with people’s “lame excuse of criticism” I would suggest taking down your encouragement for critique? There isn’t a criteria list posted for what you would accept as a good critique and so we offer advice, humbly to be sure but also something YOU have encouraged. Just an idle thought, and if I’m wrong in posting this and you are not talking about some of the wonderful pip members posting here please accept my sincerest apologies.

"The rising morning can't insure that we shall end the day; For death stands ready at the door to snatch our lives away"
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surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

9 posted 2007-07-18 01:53 PM

i just had to laugh it was great it reminds me of soemthing i would see on tv or in a movie where the two people get into a fight and one is master of it so they totally show the other person up i must say that was some crazy word using and i loved it

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

10 posted 2007-07-19 06:30 AM

Stargal... Let me make it PERFECTLY clear.. NONE OF THIS POEM IS POINTED DIRECTLY AT ANY OF THE MEMBERS OF THIS SITE.. I do encourage criticism.. BUT I DO NOT ENCOURAGE PEOPLE USING MY PERSONAL LIFE AS A POINT OF CRITICISM.. AS I HAVE SAID AND WILL SAY AGAIN.. NOBODY HAS BEEN MADE FUN OF IN THIS POST...

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