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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2007-07-12 01:13 AM


I think you love me I think i'm proud,
I think you think of me when we're hanging in the crowd,
I know I love you I know you're glad,
I know I think of you even when we're mad

cause baby even when we fight
we still end up kissing goodnight,
it ain't that long 'fore we make up,
after one long night with my coffee cup,
I see what came from above,
this crazy thing we call love,

she's out to get you and you don't see,
I should be happy that you're too wrapped up in me,
it's late and it's about time,
to reach for what is mine,

'cos baby even when we're apart,
you'll always be the one in my heart,
and even if we go down the wrong road,
we'll come back and have eachother to hold,
'cos thats what it's made of,
this crazy thing we call love,

it's been three long days without your kiss,
but I know it ain't ending like this,

cause baby even when we fight
we still end up kissing goodnight,
and even if we go down the wrong road,
we'll come back and have eachother to hold,
I see what came from above,
and this is what it's made of,
this crazy thing we call love
(baby it's just so crazy yeah)

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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tearsoflove13762
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1 posted 2007-07-12 01:47 AM


i like the story line to this but it just doesnt flow for me some lines are too long and it just throws everything off.

-Laura

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2 posted 2007-07-15 08:29 AM


Clever. Creative.

WaterFairy103
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3 posted 2007-07-15 02:43 PM


I really love this!  It's absolutely incredible, you've blown me away.  Excellent job!

I'm the literary equivalent of a Big Mac and Fries.
- Stephen King

BrittanyJ
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4 posted 2007-07-15 02:51 PM


"'cos baby even when we're apart,
you'll always be the one in my heart,
and even if we go down the wrong road,
we'll come back and have eachother to hold,"

Hunnie!!! It was amazing This was my favorite part. It's so sweet!!

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

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5 posted 2007-07-17 07:23 PM


thanks for replying. tearsoflove if you can be more specific on what lines didn't flow I'd love to make it better
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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