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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2007-07-12 01:12 AM




I can't believe everything you do,
I'm always left alone hating you,
you spy on me so I don't do wrong,
but I hate having you always sneaking along,

Leave me alone let me have my space,
I'm dying to have you outta my face,
you blackmail me after every row,
I wish I could tell you just where to go,

You spy, we fight, I have to tell the truth,
you saw what I did you even have  proof,
I don't see how it's any of your damn business anyway,
I hate that you do this every day,

I hate having to be so scared,
and worry everytime I do something I shouldnt've dared,
I still wonder how the you even find out,
it's not even your business what my life is about!

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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tearsoflove13762
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1 posted 2007-07-12 01:44 AM


hey hunnie! I have missed you I havent been on in forever.  Good write but some of the rhyming seemed a little forced.  At first it seemed like the story was talking about a boyfriend but then I realized that it may be parents which is it?

-Laura

BrittanyJ
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2 posted 2007-07-12 12:33 PM


I was wonderin that to. It was very good hunnie But parents? or boyfriend??

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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3 posted 2007-07-12 01:05 PM


aw that sounds suck-ish. but nice write. hope writing helps you feel better.

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

hunnie_girl
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4 posted 2007-07-17 07:16 PM


ahhh It was kinda parents yeah. My mom's bf.
thanks for your replies
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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