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Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2007-07-11 12:30 PM

im sinking down into the depths of me
where the waters grown so cold
im drinking in my mortal sin
im drowning with no hope

im sinking deep and losing air
my lungs are ready to break
im tired of always being wrong
im tired of my mistakes

i made myself become so numb
so i dont have to feel
so that i dont have to kill myself
to prove that i am real

i dont want your sympathy
thats not what i intend
and i dont want your apolagies
i just want to make amends

im sinking down into the depths of me
where the waters grown so cold
im drinking in my mortal sin
and im drowning with no hope

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

1 posted 2007-07-11 01:17 AM

"i made myself become so numb
so i dont have to feel
so that i dont have to kill myself
to prove that i am real"

Wow. Absolutely amazing. Good flow and excellent wording. Another good write.

I'm the literary equivalent of a Big Mac and Fries.
- Stephen King

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

2 posted 2007-07-11 05:05 PM

I always love your poems

This one especially!! You are def one of my favorite writers

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2007-07-12 12:48 PM

I try so hard not to be a pain in the Ahem hehe and reply to like everyone of your poems with the same reply but I can't help it so heres to another great amazing poem. I loved it

hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

4 posted 2007-07-12 01:56 AM

this poem is absolutely awesome. It has been a while since i have read a poem with such meaning as this one. I started to copy a part of the poem but I love the entire thing especially how you repeated the first stanza at the end.

-Laura

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