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WaterFairy103
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0 posted 2007-07-09 01:47 PM


~This is from a guy's P.O.V... Lol obviously.Be honest, please, I'm kind of experimenting with it still.Thanks!~

Whether she's all dressed up,
or wearing nothing but a smile.
Whether she goes to bed in a negligee,
or a ratty old T-shirt of mine.
She could be puffy-eyed and crying,
at the end of a love scene,
Or tossing her head back and laughing,
saying how much she loves me.

It doesn't really matter to me,
being a dork or deeply meaningful.
Every little thing she does
makes her, to me, simply beautiful.

When she's brushing her teeth in the morning,
making that face in the mirror.
It's times like that, she just doesn't get,
why I just need to be near her.
When we're watching a movie, she bursts into tears,
and cries into my shirt.
She thinks she looks like a wet cat,
I think she's so sexy it physically hurts.

It doesn't really matter to me,
being a dork or deeply meaningful.
Every little thing she does
makes her, to me, simply beautiful.

Ready for bed or a night on the town,
just a smile can make me want her.
No matter the time, or where we are,
it's impossible to keep my eyes off her.

It really doesn't mater to me,
being a dork or deeply meaningful.
Every little thing she does
makes her, to me, simply beautiful.

I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now.

© Copyright 2007 Kelsey Dianne - All Rights Reserved
BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
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1 posted 2007-07-09 02:21 PM


I think it was really good! Especially considering it was from a guys point of view Although, i'm not sure i know any guys that would say that about someone...lol, i am very glad i read it!!

Please excuse me, my heart is bleeding.

hunnie_girl
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2 posted 2007-07-09 06:48 PM


Wow this was so amazing but *sniff sniff* I wish guys were actually like that
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

Jezzika
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since 2005-01-05
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3 posted 2007-07-09 10:40 PM


This was really good..
I agree with hunnie tho...
if only guys could realle be like that...*sigh*
this poem rocked

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surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10
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4 posted 2007-07-10 06:47 PM


the poem rocked i lved it so much and i agree with the others i wish real guys could be like this or atleast show it in some way
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
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5 posted 2007-07-10 08:22 PM


NO body knows how to be a man like woman. lol. it's painfully true.

-Red

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05
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6 posted 2007-07-12 02:08 AM


There are guys like this... there really are they dont all say it quite as sweet as you put it in here but most will say it eventually if hes the one.

-Laura

helen.kan
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since 2007-07-13
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7 posted 2007-07-13 10:43 AM


awww. yes. if only, if only.
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
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8 posted 2007-07-13 10:58 AM


i find it funny that no guys have anything to say about this lol

-Red

"I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow

ChristopherRobin
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since 2007-07-13
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9 posted 2007-07-13 07:07 PM


Excellent, simply excellent, must have took you a fair while to compose, one to win a ladies heart.

I hope you keep a copy of this forever, in many years to come this may easily be very popular indeed.

pen&paper
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since 2006-06-06
Posts 513

10 posted 2007-07-13 07:59 PM


omg, i totally loved this!!!!!!!!! it was so well written and I could almost visualize little scenes in my mind...I love when poems do that. You did a great job.

Pen

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