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Alaina
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since 2007-06-16
Posts 106


0 posted 2007-07-06 11:09 PM


The demons have arrived,
Back for what they have missed and thrived.
It’s no surprise I know they’ll break me down,
Cover me in that emotion until I drown.

I know it all too well,
Not the first time I’ve been in this hell.
No, I’ve been here before and I’ll tell you my tale,
About how they knew I was weak and watched as I failed.

It began with the nervous attacks,
There was never one time when I could just relax.
Like a bus, they hit me hard.
Not a moment to think, they always caught me off guard.

They knew what would crush me to the bone,
Sucked me up into the depression cyclone.
Every night they came back to haunt me,
Wouldn’t let me sleep until I had paid the fee.

They needed to see those tears trickle down my face
Knew they had sucked me up and I’d fallen from grace.
One day the sun had peaked through,
I could finally see that shine I once knew.

Everything seemed to be getting better once more,
Until the demons came back worse than they had before.
Thought they had left, but I know I’ll never be free
And still no one will ever no the thoughts that lay inside me.


I know you'll be a sun in somebody else's sky, but why can't it be mine?
-Eddie Vedder

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BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
Posts 461
Come find me?
1 posted 2007-07-07 10:25 AM


I really liked the message in your poem, but some of the lines were a little too long. Other than that i loved it Keep posting!

Please excuse me, my heart is bleeding.

surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10
Posts 434
Canada
2 posted 2007-07-10 05:52 PM


it was a great poem i liked how it told a story and a message at the same time
jayjara
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since 2007-05-02
Posts 90
Florida
3 posted 2007-07-11 10:47 PM


It sounds like a cancer.
But I don't understand why you ended it with that last line. Please explain.

-J

Alaina
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since 2007-06-16
Posts 106

4 posted 2007-07-15 12:27 PM


i ended it this way because no one that i know knows that this has ever happened to me. it was and still is a major part of my life but i'm always the kind of person that appears happy even though i'm not so i wanted to end it like that.

I know you'll be a sun in somebody else's sky, but why can't it be mine?
-Eddie Vedder

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