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BrittanyJ Member
since 2007-06-03
Posts 461Come find me? |
Ok, this is another really old one. I really don't like the rhyming, So if you have any ideas... i know that it's wrong to love you now, but i'm not so sure i care. i should move on, forget about you, but that's something i wouldn't dare. i know that it's wrong to wish you were mine, life seems a blur without you. i should just find another friend, but i can't find the strenght to. i know that it's wrong to believe you'll come back, but i hope you will every day. i should let it go, you're gone for good, but i still hope anyway. i know it's wrong to hate you, for leaving me all alone. i should be happy that you're gone, yet my heart is heavy as stone. i know it's right to say good-bye, and allow you just to leave. i shouldn't hold on to the past, so i guess now i'll set you free. Please excuse me, my heart is bleeding. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
i should let it go, you're gone for good, but i still hope anyway.~ awe I can relate to this, that feeling sux. ahh but the poem was good I loved it. hunnie. ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
rewrite it and scrape the ryhming. it was great, but i think free verse would go much better- just what i think anyways, but, then again, what does my thinking matter. -Red "I thought I'd just mention in passing . . . I always wanted a Sparkly of my very own." -Jeremy The Crow |
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