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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain 
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Its the hardest thing you will ever do, you should know You cannot even think this is easy for me But you are blind to what you should believe You do not know how many nights i have cried because through it all ive been the only one who tried I wished on so many stars you would actually love me But thats not ever going to happen, now i see So many nights i lost so much sleep contemplating ideas that would allow me to keep you, and everything i so wanted to hold dear but every time it ended in silent tears i never had a friend that i held close by i didnt want anyone to know, over you, i could cry everyone tells me you aren't good enough, i wish it was true but the only one not good enough is me for you i cannot begin to write about all this ache you should love me, if only for my heart's sake i know it is wrong to dream up so many things but you are the only one who makes my soul sing and i know it is wrong to keep you so close the whole world but me, would admit our relationship was apposed i know you don't love me, i know you never did but what would make you lead me on like you did? before i end just a couple more words i wont deny the way i feel, im not going to coward somewhere in the dark, though that is what i want i know it would not help because there your words would taunt but i truly let myself care for you, i truly was in love im not making myself better, im not saying im above you, or anyone else for that matter, im just saying i wouldnt hurt anyone on purpose, its a mean trick, and it turns our minds avert this does not make any sense, and i know it can not but to all those guys and girls who think they're big shots i want to put an idea out there and i hope you heed my prayer don't tell people and lie to them if you really do not care ~missy afraid of my feelings and falling too deep, but i had to let go of the pain let it rain down on me |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
i havnt seen your stuff in awhile! but thats okay, because this was well worth the wait. i loved the passion. |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
thanks so much clockwork :] i actually posted in darkpoetry as well.. so yea i got somethin in there:] |
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Alaina Member
since 2007-06-16
Posts 106 |
wow i really loved this. i know exactly the feeling you felt in those poem. really great work i hope to read more of your stuff. |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
hey thanks so mucho  |
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Gifted Member
since 2007-06-26
Posts 140Caribbean |
It was a nice poem, however some of the ryhmes in it felt forced. Peace. Love. Forgiveness. |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
ya i suppose so, cause i definately was trying to keep the rhythm the same. Thanks for the critique  |
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