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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
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In Love <3

0 posted 2007-06-18 03:19 PM



One like me

Somewhere out there– there must be one like me, I’ve heard
One who paint out beauty with nothing more than words
Oh my love where hath thou gone now, is my work never done?
And I listen to the old English that rolls effortlessly off thy tongue  

Brought up like the English, proper and polite
With a tongue like a Frenchwoman’s- a fitting delight
Hair of many a culture, color of honey and soft as chick down
Many men have kissed dirt where her feet touched the ground

None have been the ones she would want or love
There’s no truth in their words with their speaking of
Affection, it’s all a physical attraction they seek
All she wants is someone who loves her, is kind, trusting, and somewhat meek

You could miss a thousand words I say
But my eyes are too loud to ignore, they won’t go away
I know you can see, I believe that you’re there
You have to be- there has to be, somebody somewhere


Inigo Montoya: You seem a decent fellow. I hate to kill you.
Westley: You seem a decent fellow. I hate to die.

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Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN
1 posted 2007-06-18 06:08 PM


i really liked this the mosst out of any ive read before. very nice job.
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062
In Love <3
2 posted 2007-06-18 06:51 PM


why? what makes it so good?

Inigo Montoya: You seem a decent fellow. I hate to kill you.
Westley: You seem a decent fellow. I hate to die.

jayjara
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since 2007-05-02
Posts 90
Florida
3 posted 2007-06-18 10:18 PM


See, this one I can see..you showed not just told...Kool...EXCEPT in the last stanza...no offense...but you can't kill it in the end...show me what is so damn freaken special about those eyes.

Get back to me.

-J

surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10
Posts 434
Canada
4 posted 2007-06-18 11:12 PM


it was beautiful and many a people feel this i applaud you
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
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In Love <3
5 posted 2007-06-19 08:39 AM


you all warm my heart

and for you j- those eyes hold the scales and tips the scales of the knowledge of his deeds. that's why they scare him, that's trigue him, that's why he listens to them.

Inigo Montoya: You seem a decent fellow. I hate to kill you.
Westley: You seem a decent fellow. I hate to die.

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