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WaterFairy103
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since 2006-05-31
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0 posted 2007-06-17 12:55 PM


There’s a beast that I keep hidden deep,
I’m scared of the havoc I know it will wreak.
It’s so close to the surface, my hands start to shake,
And I feel the reality surrounding me quake.
I’m holding on by the tips of my fingers,
Fury burns hot, and no empathy lingers.

I sit down on the bed, squeeze a pillow tight,
Praying that I don’t break into the night.
If I go I’m not sure that I can come back,
I might do something that prevents that.
I don’t really know what I’m capable of,
The only ones safe are the ones that I love.

Because I’ll have no conscience, if I go under,
I’ll only see lightning, all I’ll hear is thunder.
I’m fighting with everything that I have,
And if I lose, things ‘round here could get bad.
So don’t come in, and please don’t touch me,
Because I’m not sure that I can control the beast.

I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now.

© Copyright 2007 Kelsey Dianne - All Rights Reserved
myheartbleedsrazorblades
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since 2007-06-11
Posts 13
Canada
1 posted 2007-06-17 02:26 AM


Woo, that was a good poem!  Awesome job, I enjoyed reading that!  It was deep. intersting, emotional, I loved it!!!

Look on the bright side of life.  Dont take it all to seriuosly!

surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10
Posts 434
Canada
2 posted 2007-06-17 09:07 AM


very interesting i liked how it was a beast with in and not a beast outside if you get what i am trying to say and i loved the rhymning it was all just amazing
Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN
3 posted 2007-06-17 01:10 PM


this was so awesome that it blew my brain out of my head and onto the keyboard. very nice. (full of emotion...lol)
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
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4 posted 2007-06-17 03:19 PM


woah, i agree with everyone - you my dear, are amazing. keep up the fantastic work and i must say i enjoy your works alot.

this was my favorite line

And I feel the reality surrounding me quake.
and my second fave.

Because I’ll have no conscience, if I go under,
I’ll only see lightning, all I’ll hear is thunder.

woah, it was so cool

-Red

and in the daylight i miss the nightmare- but deathly fear it in the dark of night

BrittanyJ
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since 2007-06-03
Posts 461
Come find me?
5 posted 2007-06-17 09:27 PM


I love your work. You inspire me so much, but this has got to be my favorite! The beast inside...i loved it

Life is not a matter of destiny, but a matter of choice.

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