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Bend and Break
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Bend and Break |
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fanatic-flyer Junior Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 26Bournemouth |
Crying I feel the rain cascade over my dress Huddled in this doorway My tears fading over my delicate cheeks Nobody I asked wanted my say Crying I tried so hard My life feels like a fire Burning everything in its path I tried hard, but no I couldn't aim higher Crying Life rejected me I felt like death But this one night Its so silent I hear my breath Crying Time slows My hand reaches and clutches He takes it back My fingertips he touches Crying He leads me away My doorstep forgotten Like all those memories As if they turned rotten Crying My life turns That one night That one time I fight with all my might One more time Forget all those memories (made while listening to thanks for the memories by F.O.B) Thanks for everything, because everything makes the world happy =) |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
i liked your rhymning scheme it was good |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
not jsut the ryming sceme but the set up of your poem was incredible. i loved the way you brought all thes words together. very nice write. |
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fanatic-flyer Junior Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 26Bournemouth |
thank you very much, thats really nice, i just wrote that randomly, i didn't really think much to what i was saying, i do that alot hehe! Thanks for everything, because everything makes the world happy =) |
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