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WaterFairy103
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0 posted 2007-06-14 02:09 AM


We've always been good friends,
For as long as I can remember.
But we've always been kind of careful,
Stopping just short of tender.
But tonight when I looked at you,
Love was all I could see.
So before you drop me off,
And drive back down that street...

Would you mind coming in for a while,
And would you mind holding me tight?
Would you falling asleep with me,
Would you mind staying the night?

We could sit in front of the fire,
Touching and talking all night.
We don't have to do anything more than sleep,
'Cause next to me, you feel so right.
I know it's all a little sudden,
I've never felt like this with you before.
But before you walk me up the sidewalk,
And leave me at my door...

Would you mind coming in for a while,
And would you mind holding me tight?
Would you mind falling asleep with me,
Would you mind staying the night?

I know it's a little fast,
You reserve the right to say no.
But I'm finally listening to my heart,
And it's saying so...

Would you mind coming in for a while,
And would you mind holding me tight?
Would you mind falling asleep with me,
Would you mind staying the night?


I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now.

[This message has been edited by WaterFairy103 (06-14-2007 12:09 PM).]

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surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10
Posts 434
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1 posted 2007-06-14 07:39 AM


it is a beautiful poem i just noticed though that at certain areas there is a special character in place of a letter and i don't think it was on purpose but it is hard to read
RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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since 2007-06-11
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2 posted 2007-06-14 07:43 AM


lovely, i like it "good job!" lol
nice job, hope it turned out as it should have.

-Redetta

I stuck my bare hand into your rip cage and fished around until I found your heart ripped it out tore it apart while saying You dont need this anymore

hunnie_girl
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3 posted 2007-06-15 11:49 AM


wow this was so incredibly amazing one of my favs by you. I loved this
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

myheartbleedsrazorblades
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since 2007-06-11
Posts 13
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4 posted 2007-06-16 02:22 AM


Wow, that was really well done!!  Give me more!

Look on the bright side of life.  Dont take it all to seriuosly!

Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
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5 posted 2007-06-17 12:11 PM


your so talented.
Alaina
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6 posted 2007-06-18 11:29 AM


this is really great, it would sound awesome as a song
hunnie_girl
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7 posted 2007-06-19 05:25 PM


ahhhh I just had to reply again this was so good and I can relate so well. Love your work simply beautiful.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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