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Burning Even
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Burning Even |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN 
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the bowl is filled to the brim, the flame burns so even. im hipnotized by the steady tide, can you see the faults as they deepen? because i have seen everything, play out right before your eyes. of how you just tried so hard, just to let yourself die. breath it in, breath it out, were you surprised how hard it hit you? then sleep good, sleep tight, you have nothing more to do. you know you love it, because your falling head over heels. and you know that it wont stop, just like the hurt will never heal. so ill choke choke, as it goes up in smoke, let it all go to your head. then breath breath, rest in your disease, and everything that youve said |
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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed Senior Member
since 2007-06-11
Posts 1062In Love <3 |
i really really liked it Orange. really i did. you know you love it, because your falling head over heels. and you know that it wont stop, just like the hurt will never heal. that was my favorite stanza. i really liked the last line of it. it's so true and you really helped my place feelings and why i'm haveing them. i love that about poetry, it's so helpful all the time, it allowtep out side ourselves and look at ourselves from the outside. thanks and thanks a hundred fold -REDETTA I stuck my bare hand into your rip cage and fished around until I found your heart ripped it out tore it apart while saying You dont need this anymore |
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WaterFairy103 Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196 |
Sometimes I come to this site because I feel obligated, then I see you've posted something new and I gain a purpose. I love this one, as I love all of them, you're really good at this! Excellent job! I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now. |
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