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0 posted 2007-06-11 04:22 PM



I guess it's kinda wrong
That I'm waitin and prayin for something to happen
Even if it goes sorta kinda wrong
I'm not used to sittin and waitin
Always gotta be in the action
Whatever action that there is

I'm yawnin and silently screamin
My stereos bleedin
My parents are a little more than in my face
Don't they get that I need my space
Tryin' to find my place
Can't do this on my own
And yet here I am
So alone

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RenaissanceRomanceRunsRed
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1 posted 2007-06-11 07:43 PM


wow, hey i'm new here you can call me red. loved it pen, i loved that last part. the feeling behind it was so apparent. and i liked the part abvout your parents in your face. loved it passionatly. maybe that's why this place is called passions in poetry. lol

-Red

I stuck my bare hand into your rip cage and fished around untill I found your heart. I ripped it out and tore it apart while saying 'You don't need th

surf_painter
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2 posted 2007-06-11 11:27 PM


this was a good write but i must say it wasn't my favourite of yours it seemed i don't know rough is how i think i would put it
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3 posted 2007-06-14 12:44 PM


Can't do this on my own
And yet here I am
So alone~

Wow Pen this is my fav part it was amazing I know that feeling so well.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

WaterFairy103
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4 posted 2007-06-14 12:56 PM


WOW.  I really love this, the emotion and idea behind it.  Really, really good job!

I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now.

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