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WaterFairy103
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since 2006-05-31
Posts 196


0 posted 2007-06-08 11:43 PM



Everyone's always come to me
With their troubles and their woes.
Because of my experience,
They assume I'm the one who knows.
And I don't mind a single bit,
I want to help those I love.
But there's a secret I keep close,
One that no one knows of...

There's a good reason I tell no one,
Because I'm sure it wouldn't be good.
I'm afraid of some of them taking their life,
And I'm sure that others would.
Sometimes I hate the responsibility,
I'm sixteen-freakin'-years-old.
And other times I just wrap my arms around it,
I can take being the one who holds.

I've dealt with warring parents,
I've dealt with lying kin.
I know how to diffuse a fist-fight,
I know how to illogically reason.
I can dodge a flying plate,
And tackle an irrational man.
I've seen too much of the dark side of life,
But if life's a poker game, this is my hand.

I don't want anyone to stop asking for help,
I'm always glad to give it.
But sometimes I feel my armor crack,
I can feel someone make a divot.
All I need is someone strong,
Someone who will do their best.
To help me carry the responsibility,
My work is constant, I don't get to rest.

And it's not always a demon,
Sometimes it's a blessing.
When I get to see someone walk away,
It's myself that I've stopped second-guessing.
I know what I'm talking about,
And usually I'm sure.
If it will do more harm than good,
It's my demon, my burden, my pleasure.

I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now.

© Copyright 2007 Kelsey Dianne - All Rights Reserved
jayjara
Member
since 2007-05-02
Posts 90
Florida
1 posted 2007-06-09 08:59 PM


damn, dats nice work...simple rhyme scheme, simple flow, simple wording and good message.  

-J

rhia_5779
Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334
California
2 posted 2007-06-10 09:57 AM


I SO DEFINETLY  relate, There was no consistant rythmn I saw but it was fabulous for the uneven bits and the words. I do relate so much, I don't want anyone to stop coming to me but I wish someone could help me or I could s hare it but its worth it helping them.
You conveyed some really strong emotions in this piece

MegMeg
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since 2007-05-14
Posts 85
Virginia
3 posted 2007-06-10 05:44 PM


wow... stunning poem..... I hope you find some one you lean on.
surf_painter
Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434
Canada
4 posted 2007-06-10 10:41 PM


wow all i can say at first is wow there is such strongness to this poem a sense of courage i applaud your writing i just loved all that you wrote in it i don't think i would change a thing to it it is too powerful
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