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Teen Poetry #8

The Way I Do For Her

Tinsel
Junior Member

since 2007-06-04

Posts 36
UK

0 posted 2007-06-05 12:18 PM

Sometimes when you hold my hand,
I get a warm feeling deep down inside,
But
Not the way I do for her.
I don’t lie awake at night, thinking of you, or us.
But
I do for her.
I don’t sacrifice anything for you, and never have,
But
I do for her.
I don’t get butterflies in my stomach just looking at your picture,
But
I do for her.
I don’t become the real true brilliant me around you,
But
I do for her.
I don’t cry while writing about my love for you,
But
I do for her.
But when I’m weeping and the lights are dimmed, she doesn’t care,
But
You do.
And when I desperately need to talk, she doesn’t answer the phone,
But
You do.
I only wish I felt for you, the way
I do for her.

BrittanyJ
Member

since 2007-06-03

Posts 461
Come find me?

1 posted 2007-06-06 10:33 AM

I really liked the ending! I enjoyed reading it, and i know how you feel

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

2 posted 2007-06-06 02:30 PM

I just think only you should change the title to
I do for her.

But pretty good poem, it fit together and I liked it.

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

3 posted 2007-06-10 11:08 PM

i'm not sure what to say to this, if i was the girl that understood this would be a harsh poem but also it seems serene and truthful maybe a mix of all three

MegMeg
Member

since 2007-05-14

Posts 85
Virginia

4 posted 2007-06-11 10:57 AM

yeah, i'd be a little bit upset if i were the girl you didn't love and i read this poem, but i did enjoy the poem, i think it is a beautiful write.

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