navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #8 » When I Met Her
Teen Poetry #8
Post A Reply Post New Topic When I Met Her Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Smiling
Junior Member
since 2007-05-27
Posts 12
Barbados

0 posted 2007-05-28 11:24 AM



I'll be honest
I'll admit it
I was once daft and shallow
My smile was a snide smirk in disguise
Malevolent and hollow
I cared nothing for love after all chilavry is dead
I jus wanted to brag to my friend about how i made it to first base with her on the first night instead

My friend and I were all alike :corrupters of love for our own delight
We all thought we were "players" of this great yet challenging game
There was nothing great about cheating on someone
Our "games" were inhumane

But...
But...
Wait ...
Stop...
Evil is not borned it is comething that is developed
I developed it from the same heartache that i now strive to cause
yes indeed my heart was walked over without the slightest pause

I met her at a get-together of sorts i was there with my "back-then girlfreind" i really thought she was amazing and i was ready to put an end to this "game" i was playing
she was amazing indeed the gestures i made to her weren't the "moves " of a player they were expressions of genuine affection sincere and clear

Though the girl i'm talking about now at that time did not have such an effect on me , she had only heinous words to spread while she made fun at me

After that evening me and "Miss amazing " broke up people told me i deserved it after all what went around came back around
It was right there and then i buried the remnants of my heart in the ground

Three months Later while browsing the messenger i found myself in a very emotional conversation with the girl from before nto the one that broke my heart but the one that made fun of me
it would seem she had developed an "intrest " in me

We talked for months all the while i found myself falling for her i tried to fight the feeling but she was everything i wanted
Dangerous
Spontaneous
with her i thought i could make a relationship that was continuious

It was a year since we got together she was at my place , staring into space
then there it came from out of the blue :
"Kevin do you love me ? Because i love you"

I looked into her face
I couldn;t say it my heart was long  gone
Buried underneath bitter sand and stone
I looked into her face when it came to love i was a disgrace
But to me love was a weasel word for which i had no place
she left the house and i could feel her affction slip away
well i did it again
Sigh
Love had got away

Smiling  

© Copyright 2007 Kevin - All Rights Reserved
hunnie_girl
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567
Canada
1 posted 2007-05-29 03:13 PM


I liked the thoughts in this but near the end it seemed a bit skewed and the flow wasn't the same.
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

surf_painter
Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434
Canada
2 posted 2007-05-29 09:59 PM


i liked it but i found the same thing that hunnie did that near the end it was not the same as the beginning
Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #8 » When I Met Her

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary