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surf_painter
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0 posted 2007-05-22 10:45 PM


I ask very little
You give
Nothing, much
I'm grasping
To every touch
My heart is pounding
Your's is filled with guilt
I watch from afar
You don't notice me there
Dread surrounds you
The joy is gone
Just remember
It's not your fault


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hunnie_girl
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1 posted 2007-05-23 04:12 PM


wow this was really good I loved the last 2 lines...
hunnie.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

surf_painter
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2 posted 2007-05-23 10:55 PM


thank you very much for your kind words
TayJay01
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3 posted 2007-05-29 02:03 PM


very good write
i like the last two lines the best

so lets get a little closer noww<33
the scene aesthetic
beauty in the breakdown

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