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Rising Actions (WARNING !!!LONG!!!!) |
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gozaggss Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 33 |
FALLING No matter how hard I try I can’t seem to find my groove Stuck in traffic going opposite direction Faster than wind can move. Bewildered and dazed I fly through the turns With audacious temerity My energy burns Growing up is hard We say everyday Empty bottles held in hand We swagger and sway Regret fills my past emotions But good times as well “Good times bring bad ones”, my brother announced And that is how I fell I try to keep positive Thinking of what’s to come I can’t wait to leave this house And finally become someone To stretch my wings a little bit I think that’s all I need Live somewhere far, far away And finally plant my seed But I’m not free… CAGED Don’t take me In the car and put me in the backseat. I want to see the world Through the eyes of someone, Someone who decides for himself. A driver’s sight. I’m aware. But only of the seat back staring at me. Sitting in the middle, hating what I see. Let me see more than just What you want me to see. Is it so damaging to see “Bad” things That you would give Anything To keep me Caged? Because I would give Anything Just to be Free FRIENDS When no one seems to love you most Your friends are always very close. When you make your screech and crash They will be your crutch and cast. When you cry and feel like caving in They’ll hug away your greatest sin And when you fall They’ll be at the phone to get your call. And when you stumble and hurt your head They’ll be right there by your bed. And when you stumble and hurt your heart They’ll be right there from the start. And when you finally give up the fight They’ll be the first and last to say goodnight When you need your friends the very most They’ll always be very close. Because they need you too. PURGE My mind is no longer in turmoil I can’t explain what happened I don’t know how or why But I’m no longer feeling saddened GREEN GROWING STALKS Green Growing Stalks SIDEWAYS But it’s ok Because they’re green And it doesn’t matter why Because they’re growing And I’m fine with it Because nothing stalks me anymore CHAOGICAL Dotted 8th, 8th note Dotted 8th, dotted 8th 16th note, dotted 16th All the same time in 5/7 signature Everything seems to drag, but it doesn’t Accidentals of F#, D#, and G# But skipping C completely Accidentals in Eb, Db, and Ab Skipping B completely Confusion around Nothing makes sense But it’s alright. It all sounds natural Even though nothing is. Just don’t think and it all fades Away… FLOAT Sometimes The only way you can go is up And sometimes You just feel like floating UPRISING I think I need a break soon Stress is taking over My life is rapid running dry No more four-leaf clover Everyday is a roller coaster I get over one thing To be set upon by another What will my future bring? I’m approached from all sides By No-mans-land Not sure what to do anymore Fight it or just wash my hand? War drums pound from the front seats And arrows fly east to west Each one trying to prove That their way is the best Caught in the back seat Sitting in the middle Sits I lonely and afeared Of every arrow, sharp and near Caught in the middle Of a parental civil war Over how to raise a 17 year old “child” This all just makes a head sore (or maybe walk out the door) Maybe that’s what I should do That’ll teach them both a lesson Maybe they’d like it too I can’t thought These fights are over me How would they react If from a mediators place I flee? I guess it could be worse… I could be the one fighting But I don’t want any war. Period But it’s my fuse they’re lighting I’m feeling stretched out too far They drive me further everyday I can’t take much more of this They drive me further everyday I need a change of scenery I need to get out of this town Maybe fly to the moon and take a nap Whilst no one else is around What’s it like to truly be free? And fly far far away See what you want to see To slide away from the fray Is it calm and serene? Or like music from a song? Can you do what you want there? Is that what it’s like to belong? What if I do walk then? What if I simply wander off? Will I get caught or will I be happy? Or will people just scoff? Being a teen Is a lot like being in A.A. Only no one has a sponser And no one will ever stay Will it ever end? I don’t want to be a teen Maybe we need a civil rights revolution Because we’re all being starved lean Our lives aren’t ruined Just fundamentally altered It doesn’t make life impossible, just difficult That’s why so many of us faltered We can survive Just we need some change We need to belong somewhere And not be estranged Leave us alone a little Give us a chance To date without a parental parrot on our shoulder And just take us to a dance Let us sleep in on a Saturday And stay up late on Friday Let us make our own good or bad choices And go out when we may If you give us a little freedom We’ll grow up the very best way Best for us, best for you, best for everyone And then we’ll stay… BREATH Nothing in life is certain Except for death So live life the way you want to Enjoy Every.Single.Breath I'M SORRY The final resolving peak Has been climbed at last I’m at peace right now I’ve finally finished my task I stamp my foot On the warming ground Because I think I like it That final, resolving sound My foot falls Where no one has tread before Just that thought alone That keeps me from being sore I sit and take out my journal That these words now lay upon Read all that I have written And how I came along Many hours fill up many pages Many emotions as well Reading back on how I felt… I was in a bad place, I could tell Some good moods But most were bad Then I realized how rapid they changed Like passing fashionable fads Or like how my life Was much alike a song A very downbeat one, I noted Very sad, alone, and long The energy rose after a while I think I was finding me Then tensions rose a little bit I was as insane sounding as I could be It resolved like all songs do And I’m eternally grateful I wrote a little more And found myself a lull That’s when I began to climb Or “float” as I put it I slowly began to realize the truth And had my final little fit After so much fighting I thought that I’d be tired But it had the opposite effect I smiled and admired The struggles made me stronger And victories gifted strength I looked back and gave my blessings To its glorious struggling length I’ll forgive my parents They’re doing what they think best I’ll trust them a little bit more And give this fight a rest If I show them how I changed Will I get freedom that way? “Maybe it’s worth a shot” I think As I turn to them and say “I’m sorry” |
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unholyjudgement Member
since 2007-02-27
Posts 116Wherever my soul takes me next |
Very nice. The ending really wrapped the entire this up. I thought this was just superb, really worth reading through, and a little rough. I hope u dont mind me saying that although it was brilliant it seemed dis orderly at first. Kind of like you jammed a few things in there. in particular the GREEN GROWING STALKS section. Idk maybe im wrong. maybe that one and the next stuck out for me because i dident really understand them. they dident really seem to fit in. Sorry im starting to ramble. Please tell me what the stalks section and the one after that meant to you. I think that would really clear things up. Thanks You can hit me ^ @ zachariababy@aol.com My mind is like lightning |
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gozaggss Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 33 |
it was a series of 10 poems i wrote in one day. each poem is just how i felt at each point. from near suicidal to rambling crazy to anger to acceptance. it was a tough day. but writing it all down helped alot. The Green Growing Stalks was just something in one of my weird rambling nonsense moods. nothing really made any sense. stuff came at me sideways. but i realized that i was ok with it. because it all had a silver lining |
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unholyjudgement Member
since 2007-02-27
Posts 116Wherever my soul takes me next |
how often those are those the best. Well i really liked your work and was just wondering and well thank you. Ive never been so speechless My mind is like lightning |
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rebel~angel Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 71Iowa USA |
That was amazing! Even though it was really long, I could not stop reading it. It really has a rhythm or something...I liked it! Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
I think this is brilliant but it def needs to be tightened and if they are seperate they don't need to be together these are personally the bits I think you should stick with and maybe try to use to tighten it up. Regret fills my past emotions But good times as well “Good times bring bad ones”, my brother announced And that is how I fell I try to keep positive Thinking of what’s to come I can’t wait to leave this house And finally be someone To stretch my wings a little bit I think that’s all I need Live somewhere, far away And finally plant my seed Don’t take me In the car and put me in the backseat. I want to see the world Through the eyes of someone, Someone who decides for himself. A driver’s sight. I’m aware. But only of the seat back staring at me. Sitting in the middle, hating what I see. Let me see more than just What you want me to see. Is it so damaging to see “Bad” things That you would give When no one seems to love you most Your friends are always close. When you make your screech and crash They will be your crutch and cast. When you cry and feel like caving in They’ll hug away your greatest sin And when you fall They’ll be at the phone to get your call. And when you stumble and hurt your head They’ll be right there by your bed. And when you stumble and hurt your heart They’ll be right there from the start. And when you finally give up the fight They’ll be the first and last to say goodnight When you need your friends the very most They’ll always be very close. Because they need you too. GREEN GROWING STALKS Green Growing Stalks SIDEWAYS But it’s ok Because they’re green And it doesn’t matter why Because they’re growing And I’m fine with it Because nothing stalks me anymore CHAOGICAL Dotted 8th, 8th note Dotted 8th, dotted 8th 16th note, dotted 16th All the same time in 5/7 signature Everything seems to drag, but it doesn’t Accidentals of F#, D#, and G# But skipping C completely Accidentals in Eb, Db, and Ab Skipping B completely Confusion around Nothing makes sense But it’s alright. It all sounds natural Even though nothing is. Just don’t think and it all fades Away… FLOAT Sometimes The only way you can go is up And sometimes You just feel like floating UPRISING I think I need a break soon Stress is taking over My life is rapid running dry No more four-leaf clover Everyday is a roller coaster I get over one thing To be set upon by another What will my future bring? War drums pound from the front seats And arrows fly east to west Each one trying to prove That ?_they are _? best *poss correction Caught in the back seat Sitting in the middle I can’t thing These fights are over me How would they react If from a mediators place I flee? I guess it could be worse… I could be the one fighting But I don’t want any war. Period But it’s my fuse they’re lighting I’m feeling stretched out too far They drive me further everyday I can’t take much more of this They drive me further everyday I need a change of scenery I need to get out of this town Maybe fly to the moon and take a nap Whilst no one is around What’s it like to truly be free? And fly far far away See what you want to see To slide *far) from the fray Is it calm and serene? Or like music from a song? Can you do what you want there? Is that what it’s like to belong? What if I do walk then? What if I simply wander off? Will I get caught or will I be happy? Or will people just scoff? Being a teen Is a lot like being in A.A. Only no one has a sponser And no one will ever stay Our lives aren’t ruined Just fundamentally altered It doesn’t make life impossible, just difficult That’s why so many of us faltered *like it but faltered? We can survive Just we need some change We need to belong somewhere And not be estranged Let us sleep in on a Saturday And stay up late on Friday Let us make our own good or bad choices And go out when we may If you give us a little freedom We’ll grow up the very best way Best for us, best for you, best for everyone And then we’ll stay… BREATH Nothing in life is certain Except for death So live life the way you want to Enjoy Every.Single.Breath I'M SORRY The final resolving peak Has been climbed at last I’m at peace right now I’ve finished my task I stamp my foot On the warming ground Because I think I like it That final, resolving sound My foot falls Where no one has tread before Just that thought alone That keeps me from being sore I sit and take out my journal That these words now lay upon Read all that I have written And how I came along Many hours fill up many pages Many emotions as well Reading back on how I felt… I was in a bad place, I can tell Or like how my life Was much alike a song A very downbeat one, I noted Very sad, alone, and long It resolved like all songs do And I’m eternally grateful I wrote a little more And found myself at lull That’s when I began to climb Or “float” as I put it I slowly began to realize the truth And had my final little fit After so much fighting I thought that I’d be tired But it had the opposite effect I smiled and ?was( admired The struggles made me stronger And victories gifted strength I looked back and gave my blessings To its glorious struggling length I’ll forgive my parents They’re doing what they think best I’ll trust them a little bit more And give this fight a rest If I show them how I changed Will I get freedom that way? “Maybe it’s worth a shot” I think As I turn to them and say “I’m sorry” |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
Hmm... I wanna re-read that.. it did sound like a tough day.. its strange how people go from being sad to happy to mad to just content and wondering.. mood swings hehe :] My favorites were the real short ones, because i think these were the parts you were more light-hearted and slightly happier "FLOAT Sometimes The only way you can go is up And sometimes You just feel like floating BREATH Nothing in life is certain Except for death So live life the way you want to Enjoy Every.Single.Breath" I definetely feel the same way.. I really liked those.. I liked this, it was very interesting  *goes to re-read the loong poem:]* ~missy |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Wow this was truly amazing yes long too tho. I just couldn't stop reading it tho. I can relate to so much in this. hope to read more soon... hunnie. ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Did you take this from pages of your journal? Because it certainly read that way. I found this very moving--even when I wanted to see you burst through quatrain--I remember the feeling of uncertainty. I think you've got a lot to work with here, as it is real and honest, and it certainly reached out to touch my spirit. To me, it felt like a torrent of feeling, and I felt sixteen, with my skin on inside out again. Keep this lovie! |
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