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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2007-04-24 12:37 PM


I get in trouble everyday because of him,
but he has me convinced he's not just a whim,
I know it was a bit past bedtime,
but is talking 20 minutes past 10 that bad of a crime?

mom you say I lost your trust but that happened long ago,
and theres so much i wanna tell you that you don't even know,
like how I want him to kiss me in the poring rain,
and how being apart drives me insane,

and how it'd be so easy to run away from here,
being trapped this much I see that ending drawing near,
he's the only thing keeping me here in case he's not a whim,
and now I stay here praying everyday because of him.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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1 posted 2007-04-26 09:29 PM


wow this is a very good poem nice rhymning and emotion i like the thought that seems to have been put into it
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2 posted 2007-04-30 12:29 PM


thanx for your reply surf_painter I will be looking for some of your poems too...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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3 posted 2007-05-04 03:49 AM


filled with feelings, dreams, and even truth lovely poem
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4 posted 2007-05-04 03:52 AM


hmmm that could be misunderstud by truth i meen the line
"mom you say I lost your trust but that happened long ago"
becouse i see that as i thing true to all teens parents never trust us

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5 posted 2007-05-07 11:38 AM


Omg hunnie!
IM GOING THROUGH THE EXACT SAME THING!
I hate my parents not trusting me.. it stinks:[
But yea, i think i love him?
heh..maybe everybody goes through the same thing.. this really freaked me out because THIS is the poem ive been trying to write, but you wrote it for me!
haha good job, its great:]

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6 posted 2007-05-08 12:50 PM


tx you all for replying...
hunnie

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7 posted 2007-05-14 10:02 PM


Great writing.
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8 posted 2007-05-17 06:44 PM


this is exactly how i feel!
I LOVE IT!!!

so lets get a little closer noww<33
the scene aesthetic
beauty in the breakdown

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9 posted 2007-05-18 01:36 AM



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