navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #8 » Sedated
Teen Poetry #8
Post A Reply Post New Topic Sedated Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

0 posted 2007-04-12 05:44 PM



will you please keep me sedated,
I dont want see what ive become.
I feel like im sinking,
Im at a loss for what ive done.

Im falling away,
With only one escape.

So ill just throw my head back,
as i raise the bottle up.
Ive downed three pints of jack today,
and ive still not had enough.

Even when im drunk as hell,
Im bleeding through the seems,
of a poorly made costume;
that was once the real me.

So ill keep myself sedated,
I dont want to see what ive become.
I feel like im sinking,
And im at a loss for what ive done.

© Copyright 2007 Bryan Lucas - All Rights Reserved
WaterFairy103
Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196

1 posted 2007-04-12 05:48 PM


"Even when im drunk as hell,
I'm bleeding through the seems,
of a poorly made costume;
that was once the real me."

My personal favorite line.  I love it, great flow, very dark and twisty.  Excellent write!

I've stopped fighting my inner demons... we're on the same side now.

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN
2 posted 2007-04-12 06:35 PM


thanks
hunnie_girl
Deputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Elite
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567
Canada
3 posted 2007-04-14 01:19 AM


this is the best poem ever I love it...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia
4 posted 2007-04-14 01:54 AM


This is great.. Another huge poem from the American Mr Beauty!!
playing.with.crayons
Member
since 2006-01-02
Posts 362
Neverland
5 posted 2007-04-16 08:22 AM


pretty rad username, by the way.

more importantly, I *enjoyed* your write, if thats the right word.
lovely poem.
~ cheye

Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Teen Poetry #8 » Sedated

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary