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justanotherstorm
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0 posted 2007-11-18 01:28 AM


yeah im really tired so i dont know if this makes n e sense so yeah

i dont want you to listen to my words
i want you to listen to my heart
lets start from the beginning to the end
let make up and become friends again
you know how i do my rhymes
i take my time
see whats wrong from right
I love my God
but I'm confused
though i listen to His word
and become amused
i cant take it
just wanna break it
so listen
i need help

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1 posted 2007-11-18 02:02 AM


wow It is not always an easy thing to do to ask for help... It is a good thing to do but the hardest thing in the world. I like how you reached out in this poem, it showed so much emotion to me, If you ever need to talk I am always here if you need to vent.
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justanotherstorm
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2 posted 2007-11-18 02:10 AM


thanks i might ask help from time to time but thanks
Artic Wind
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3 posted 2007-11-18 10:43 AM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

BrittanyJ
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4 posted 2007-11-18 01:00 PM


Wow, i agree with hunnie. This did show a lot of emotion. And it made sense to me Very nicely written, and i'm here as well if you ever need to talk.

So no more hiding all your pain, you deserve a new start. That's why i'm closing myself away, this is a message from your heart.

rebelangelv
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5 posted 2007-11-18 04:50 PM


stormy, this is really deep i liked it. its kinda confusing.
dont listen to my words
listen to my heart

i loved that line soooo much. it was great. really passionate in ur writng cant w8 to read more.

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"  

justanotherstorm
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6 posted 2007-11-18 06:42 PM


thnx people
stormy?? well thnx again
hmm i dont think im that good at poetry

rebelangelv
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7 posted 2007-11-18 06:55 PM


poetry isnt about rhyming or making sence its about pouring ur soul out on paper and making something beautiful.

If i had to choose between you and breathing, id use my last breath to say "I love you"  

justanotherstorm
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8 posted 2007-11-18 11:10 PM


yeah i know that i write to express my feelings my inner thoughts my deep void and my darkness
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