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Teen Poetry #8

Lovin' The Music

music_is_my_soul
Junior Member

since 2007-04-07

Posts 18
MA, USA

0 posted 2007-04-07 04:52 PM

Swayin' to the beat
Love movin' ya feet
Can't stop that feelin'
Boy, you got me keelin'

short, sweet, to the point.

I'm the kind-a human wrecakge that ya love!
~Gerard Way

Clockwork_Orange
Senior Member

since 2007-03-23

Posts 620
Space Camp, IN

1 posted 2007-04-07 04:56 PM

very short. i think its a great start but it needs more to it. but thats just me.

music_is_my_soul
Junior Member

since 2007-04-07

Posts 18
MA, USA

2 posted 2007-04-07 04:57 PM

had nothin' else in my empty head...

I'm the kind-a human wrecakge that ya love!
~Gerard Way

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

3 posted 2007-04-11 11:31 PM

Well I agree, def. could have more added, because it was really good. hope you can think of something to add, worth expanding.
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

unholyjudgement
Member

since 2007-02-27

Posts 116
Wherever my soul takes me next

4 posted 2007-04-13 09:15 AM

most deff could have used more... N' yet sumtimes

Short Simple N' to the point

Is best

My mind is like lightning
One brilliant flash and its gone

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