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RevengeIsMine
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0 posted 2007-04-02 10:23 AM



A Million Tears (Please Forgive Me Dad)


I cried a million tears today, wishing you were here
Hoping you’d appear in my door way and rush to hold me near
I know it was wrong to think you would
But I still prayed like a daughter should

You haven’t seen your granddaughter in two months or more
It was they day I told you I hated you and pushed you too the floor
I cried myself to sleep that night, wishing I could take it all back
Knowing you’d probably never forgive me, the confidence I did lack

I was once your little girl who sat upon your lap
And every Christmas I would wear that silly little cap
The cap that you gave to me when I was only three
You promised every time I wore it, I would feel free

You disappointed me and then you let me down
Turned my smile upside down and made it into a frown
If you had just said you loved me, it wouldn’t of come to this
You don’t have to say the words, but you could have gave me a small cuddle and a tiny little kiss

Now is sit upon this bench, holding on to all I own
My gorgeous baby daughter and a stupid mobile phone
My life’s a complete mess and I’m tearing out my hair
I’m cold and upset because life just isn’t fair
There’s nobody to tell me that everything will be fine
To tell me Ella doesn’t need an operation and no papers I need to sign
Instead there’s a million tears running from my eyes
And a thousand people watching me wondering, why I am no longer wise
And every inch of my body is being torn into,
To think your not here and Ella might be going too

Dad, if you read this you need to come home fast
I don’t know the future and I can’t fix the past
Maybe I really wasn’t worth shedding a final tear
But I cried a million tears tonight, wishing you were here


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hunnie_girl
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1 posted 2007-04-03 12:44 PM


oh Jessica this is so sad. Is Ella ok? I hope you and your dad can patch things up soon...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

RevengeIsMine
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2 posted 2007-04-03 01:42 AM


Thanx for replying to my poem hunnie.. Me and Ella will be okay, at least thats what i keep praying... I don't think i'm okay anymore all i ever do is cry and all i really wanted is somebody to talk to and i don't have that anymore, i don't have my dad, and i don't want to worry my mum and the only person i used to have i thinks gotten sick of me because i never hear from him anymore...
rhia_5779
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3 posted 2007-04-03 05:29 AM


whats wrong with ella?
unholyjudgement
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4 posted 2007-04-03 10:08 AM


Thnx a lot u added about 20 tears to my life.
That was so beautiful. Thank you

My mind is like lightning
One brilliant flash and its gone

RevengeIsMine
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5 posted 2007-04-03 11:02 AM


Hi Rihia, Ella has been diagnosed with Leukaemia. At the moment we are waiting on a few test to come back so when can see how severe and aggressive it is.. No matter the outcome i think its going to be a very long road ahead. I'm just praying, that as a single mum, I'm going to have the strength to get through.
hunnie_girl
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6 posted 2007-04-04 12:21 PM


Well Jessica you know you can always talk to me if you want. ya know my email addy. if you ever need to vent.
hope you feel better soon,
i'll pray for you and Ella...
luv from,
hunnie

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7 posted 2007-04-04 12:42 PM


i can tell there is alot more passion in you than shows through in this predictable poem. dont let the last word of every line dictate what comes next. i think youll find much more meaning if you free your writing from this direct rhyme after rhyme style
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