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NCCXC86 Junior Member
since 2006-09-25
Posts 18Michigan |
"You little creep," That's what she said, these quotes from my mother, get better every day. "You'll be nothing, just like your father, at least that's what the kids on the street say." And Valerie spent her hours at the airport, She said planes made her feel like she could get away. And I spent my hours at the hospital, wishing I had an airport... Someday...because some days are just too hard. You and I hung like space stations and rocketships, and we dreamed like we were things of the sky. We kissed like kings and queens and lovers, and whispered into the night "Our love will never die." I waited on the porch, hoping that you'd call, and my dialing finger's tired, and your voicemail is full. I've been counting stars just to pass the time. And that damn phone just rang, but it wasn't you on the line. But you don't seem to mind. And then it was time to go, but I was thinking of summer, knowing that in June, you wouldn't be around. And they say that children make the greatest soldiers, they do just like they're told, and take up less space on the ground. And it seems to me that we'd been here before. Where were you when you were at the airport? Where were you when I wanted to fly? Tell me where your heart was when you were at the airport. These planes, they fall from the sky. And I wish I had an airport, some days. Because some days are just too hard. |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
nice. this had great flow and the words didnt seem forced, i really like the children as soldiers bit. very awesome. C.O. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Wow.. I can not say anything. Speechless. Definitely one of the best I have ever read in a while. I havent been on as much but still...WoW.. Excellent. There may be minor editing things. But I will go over this later and look at it |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
man for how many people are on here you would think at least one would take the time to check out one of my poems but i guess the new guy isnt worth anything is he? ps this poem was really good and very real. nice. |
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shannonbaker Junior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 12 |
I loved the 3rd and 4th stanza. Especially the children as soilders. I loved it, very good. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
I really like this it's ben awhile since I read something from you... hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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