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The blue eyed angel who loved ketchup.
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The blue eyed angel who loved ketchup. |
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Belinda Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126UK 
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Repost. Still think there is room for improvement so comments would be much appreciated. Thanks. She slams two photo's, Down on the table. She says they are why, She is so unstable. I know what they are, Both in the same scene. One is of a little girl, The other of an abnoxious teen. The little girl sits, Playing dollies on the floor. The person taking the photo, Is stood at the door. Her blonde bouncy curls, Fall to cover one eye. She doesn't look at the camera, Because she is too shy. The eye that is showing, Is bright blue and twinkles. You can tell she is giggling, From the way her nose wrinkles. who I look to the other picture, Tears fill my eyes. I curl up in shame, And my mother just cries. The teenager is sat, In the very same place. No dolls are before her, No smile on this face. Her straightened blonde hair, Delibratley covers one eye. A subconcious shield, To hide every lie. The eye that is showing, Is blue and ice cold. Her closed body language, Screams for someone to hold. "Both of these pictures, Show my little princess. They bring so much pain, That I cannot express." I look at my mother, Then stare at the ground, I try to speak, But cannot make a sound. The angel who loved ketchup, Has dissappeared without a trace. The innocence and naievety, Has left no mark upon her face. Expect nothing, Prepare for anything. |
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pen&paper Senior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 513 |
i loved this. It's absolutely me. GREAT WRITE! |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
this was really good. it was really down to earth and real. the way people chage is inevitible, whether we like it or not. its kinda unsettling to think about. hey will you do a favor and read Im Not Worthless? |
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Me...Myself New Member
since 2005-06-23
Posts 4 |
cute |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
I remember the first time I read this, i liked it then and I still love it now... I know exactly that feeling, can so easily relate... hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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