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thesongyoukeepsinging
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since 2007-03-23
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Georgia, US

0 posted 2007-03-23 09:21 AM



She Loved Him!
End of story.
She couldn't hide it
Couldn't deny it
Everyone kew it
They could see it
When his name came up
her eyes could light up an
entire night sky
She loved everything about him
His smile, His smell
His laugh, His touch
His voice, His kiss
It was everything she
could ever have wanted
He was the picture
she saw when she awakened
And the dream she dreamt
when she slept
He was every guy that she
saw walk by
He was every brush
across her shoulders
He was the only person
in a room full of people
He was the song in the breeze
that whisked her away
The one that she never
stopped thinking about
He was the one that she wanted
for forever!

She Misses Him
End of Story.
She can't hide it
Can't deny it
Everyone knows it
They can see it
She misses his name being
brought up in conversation
The beam of happyness she always
felt with him
She misses everything about him
His smile, His smell
His laugh, His touch
His voice, His kiss
She misses everything she
ever had with him
He's no longer the picture
that she wakes to
Or the dream that she
sleeps to
Now she sees every guy
for who they really are... pain
She feels every person bump
into her on the streets
And she loses her way
in a big crowd of people
The song that she used to hear
has now lost its melody
The wind just gives her a chill
and her mind is full of wandering
He was the one she
wanted for forever
Now she must move on
with her life
And find a new love
and she really is not sure
if it will ever really be the same...

She Loved Him

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rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334
California
1 posted 2007-03-24 12:30 PM


This was good. Very chilling. Try explaining more how she lost him. I liked those two stanzas the way they were though but add for a middle.
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