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WaterFairy103
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since 2006-05-31
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0 posted 2007-02-26 05:32 PM


Don't you know that fairy tales tell a lie?
Prince Charming is a player,
Snow White wants to be a guy.
Sleeping Beauty is just lazy,
Rapunzel needs a cut,
Ariel's a tomboy
And Jasmine is a $lut.

Happily ever after is a fake.
You've always gotta give
Just a little more than you take.
Happiness shouldn't have to be an ending.
All those princess are just pretending.

When the fairy dust clears,
You're in for a surprise,
You married a Prince, sweetheart,
And trust me, he's no prize..
Now that you're a Queen,
You have to walk the walk,
And when you get home late at night,
Charming won't want to talk.

Happily ever after isn't easy,
You have to be willing
To get queasy.
Because you're the one who makes your happy ending,
But you know that you're pretending.

I know it's rough out there,
You have to guard your heart.
But you have to let someone in,
Before something will start.
Make your expectations real,
And he'll come to you.
And it'll be a lot of work,
But it'll be worth it, too.

Happily ever after isn't dead set.
Because all those fairy tales
Just aren't finished yet
Happiness doesn't have to be an ending.
All you have to do is stop pretending

You've gotta stop daydreaming,
True love won't find itself.
You have to know who you are,
Before you can be part of someone else.

~The flow isn't great, but these are lyrics, so unless you hear me singing it...~

Those who dance are considered insane by those who cannot hear the music.

© Copyright 2007 Kelsey Dianne - All Rights Reserved
hunnie_girl
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1 posted 2007-02-26 11:45 PM


Wow, I love this the 1st verse I was howling with laughter because well yah it was really blunt and the rest I was nodding and going how true...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

chiLanta
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since 2006-12-01
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2 posted 2007-03-07 06:46 PM


for real that was blunt but yea i liked it too good write keep em coming
rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
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3 posted 2007-03-08 04:05 PM


I liked the first stanza. It made me laugh, and I needed to laugh. Thanks

You are so talented..ur one of my fav writers here

SiR3N
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since 2007-03-07
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Pennsylvania
4 posted 2007-03-08 11:26 PM


I love how you integrated the fairy tale genre into this poem to get your point across. Splendid poem. ^_^
unholyjudgement
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since 2007-02-27
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Wherever my soul takes me next
5 posted 2007-03-14 09:03 AM


Short,
Simple,
& To The Point
Luvved it thnx

My mind is like lightning
One brilliant flash and its gone

Sweetpali08
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since 2006-05-07
Posts 40

6 posted 2007-03-18 02:47 PM


OMG....
This is just amazingly done. I love the way you expressed everything................

"How are they the VICTIMS if they are the OCCUPIERS?!"
~Paradise now

*wishfull*thinking*
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since 2006-09-03
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north east of england
7 posted 2007-03-18 03:57 PM


wow my favourite stanza was the 1st onem a good read and a laugh lol

keep it up lolxx

I have been waiting all of my life
for you to come along and make everything alright, save me, just please save me

Thebaer
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since 2007-03-18
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8 posted 2007-03-19 08:44 PM


At first i thought it cliche(dont know how to spell that)but as the poem progressed your way of words told how it is, and just what it takes to be loved. Good Job
thesongyoukeepsinging
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since 2007-03-23
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9 posted 2007-03-23 09:27 AM


wow... very honest.... i think that we do dream alittle too much!! great job

~Life is not about how many breaths you take, but the moments that take your breath away!!~

MixedChica
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since 2006-11-10
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10 posted 2007-03-23 11:21 PM


This is amazing, i love this poem.
I can't describe how awesome this is
I'm like everyone else, i love the first stanza it cracked me up and really made me want to continue reading.

pencil&paper
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since 2006-09-09
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asleep somewhere in my head
11 posted 2007-03-26 11:12 PM


GREAT poem and i have to agree i liked the first line best too

"Those who danced were thought to be quite insane by those who could not hear the music."~Angela Monet

TayJay01
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since 2007-04-24
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12 posted 2007-04-29 08:03 AM


I really liked this poem alot
i cant wait to hear someone singing it
GOOD JOB!

so lets get a little closer noww<33
the scene aesthetic
beauty in the breakdown

surf_painter
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since 2007-04-10
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13 posted 2007-04-30 03:41 PM


i liked it alot it was very cool i could only imagine what itwould be like as a song being sung it would be very cool
wallflower313
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since 2007-10-21
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14 posted 2007-10-21 01:42 PM


i absolutely loved it
Clockwork_Orange
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Space Camp, IN
15 posted 2007-10-21 05:46 PM


i really cant tell you what i think about this poem because i cant really explain it. i can pretty much sum it up in only one word.    briliance

Assassin_of_Verse
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that So Cal
16 posted 2007-10-23 04:26 AM


These lyrics are amzing! I loved how you were able to seemingly rip apart the common fairy tale, and then use it to prove your point.

I apologize if this sounds nosy, but did the bluntness stem from personal experience?

The more you know, the more you know you don't know.-Socrates

pen&paper
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since 2006-06-06
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17 posted 2007-11-03 10:13 PM


I loved this. And it did actually flow quite nicely.Great Write.

Pen

WaterFairy103
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since 2006-05-31
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18 posted 2007-11-04 09:31 PM


Lol to answer your question, yeah, the bluntness does kind of stem from personal experience... I've been in too many relationships where I was the only one trying, lol, and I firmly believe that to make a relationship work both people have to work hard at it... Lol I was a little frustrated by mankind when I wrote this one, but it's one of my best so I'd do it all again!

I SPEAK my mind because it HURTS to bite my tongue.

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
19 posted 2007-11-12 10:05 PM


love the name

ARCTIC WIND

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