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STOP_JUDGiiN_M3
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since 2007-02-07
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0 posted 2007-02-07 02:17 PM




Boys would tell you this
just to get you to do that
that’s just the bottom line
but when you tell them your having their baby
they say it ain’t mine
this happened just by having
one night of pleasure
That’s lead to 9 months of pain
and 3 days away from home
with a baby to name
now you walking around with a baby,
holding your head down knowing you are the only one to blame
thinking that one kiss lead to this feeling of shame
while boys out have all the fun
girls get left with yall daughter or son
you might think I’m being funny
but take my advice
don’t lay down
if you not ready to pay the price, and sacrifice

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fanatic-flyer
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since 2007-02-07
Posts 26
Bournemouth
1 posted 2007-02-07 02:50 PM


wow, that is good, very hard hitting and true. I like it

Thanks for everything, because everything makes the world happy =)

STOP_JUDGiiN_M3
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since 2007-02-07
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2 posted 2007-02-07 08:01 PM


THANKS... I MEAN TO BE HONEST IN MOST CASES IT DOES BE LIKE THIS. I'M GLAD YOU LIKE IT!

FTR...ALLDAii!!

hunnie_girl
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3 posted 2007-02-07 10:58 PM


I really liked this, first time I've seen you around so welcome to Passions.. hope to read more...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia
4 posted 2007-02-08 06:18 AM


Welcome to PIP... and i hope you enjoy your stay.. i know exactly where your coming from this..  I have and am in a similar position... And i know how hard it is.. Anyway Good Write!
stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
5 posted 2007-02-08 09:08 AM


Hey,

Welcome to the teen forum of passions! Glad to see a couple new faces, seems like every time I log online I see new people with wonderful poetry. I hope you enjoy your stay with us

Enjoyable poem; your right, this kind of thing happens all the time and I like how you said in the poem that you need to take responsibilites.

Thanks for sharing, I look forward to reading more of your work

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino            @-->---

STOP_JUDGiiN_M3
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since 2007-02-07
Posts 16

6 posted 2007-02-08 03:02 PM


WELL I'M UNDER THE IMPRESSION THAT YOUR THINKIN MII POEM IS ABOUT ME. NO ITS NOT, I JUST SEE MORE AND MORE TEENS GETTING INTO SITUATION, THEY COULD HAVE AVOIDED. AND THIS SEEM LIKE THE ONE THAT HIT ME MOST. BUT THNKS TO ALL...

FTR...ALLDAii!!

stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
7 posted 2007-02-08 06:16 PM


Ummm... Actually I admit that I didn't think this poem was about you... but... umm... still, good write

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino            @-->---

STOP_JUDGiiN_M3
Junior Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 16

8 posted 2007-02-08 06:27 PM


0H...THANKS!
dctalk1129
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since 2007-02-08
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9 posted 2007-02-08 09:37 PM


Hey, I like it a lot. I know exactly where u are coming from, my favorite line was "one night of pleasure can lead to nine months of pain". Good job, check out my poem, its "What If?"
STOP_JUDGiiN_M3
Junior Member
since 2007-02-07
Posts 16

10 posted 2007-02-09 09:21 AM


Wow...thanks!! That happens to be one of my favorite lines too. thank you all for welcoming me!!

FTR...ALLDAii!!

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