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My dad
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My dad |
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chiLanta Junior Member
since 2006-12-01
Posts 47 |
She wakes him up every morn, and walks with him to the bath room. She pours him his coffee, and puts the surgar in it for him, because if he does it, he will spill it everywhere... During the day he just stares, sitting in the middle of the room. Sometimes he just walks in circles, and always has to know where she is. He can't put his own clothes on anymore, and can't take a shower by himself. He needs to be told to brush and shave, because if he isn't, he won't. His walk is so slow, and he falls so much. He gets mad if you try to help, but if you dont that is when he gets hurt. He was always so strong, the man of the house, but now he is like a child that I have to watch. I miss him, and I know she does too. He may not be six feet, but he isn't who my dad was. It hurts to think back to the man he was, because of what he is now, and I know I can't get mad, but sometimes the anger hurts so bad. He gets so mean sometimes, and that was never him. He can't even hold a conversation with anyone, because he doesn't comprehend. My mother tries so hard to take care of him, but in that process I'm losing her too. She is always so strong, the one I can always run too, and now I think she cries more then I do. My sister and brother are taking it harder then me, but I think i'm taking it harder then i make my self beleive. We all miss him, the whole family and all our friends. I know we all wish him to come back, even though he is right in front of us, I know he won't be himself again. Slowing melting away, growing weaker and weaker everyday. He knows there is something wrong, but just doesn't understand. This is the story of a man and his family that have to live with altimerz I know thats not how you spell altimerz but i am having a brain freeze, this is just a rough draft so tell me what you guys think... |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
I liked this. The only thing I would change is the poem is put in kind of sentence structure so it makes you think oh I don;t really want to read all this. but if it was broken up more it would be a lot easier to read and potray the meaning. hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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