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lemonraindrops
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0 posted 2007-01-28 09:24 PM


"Awaiting His Return"

She sits alone and waits all day
With nothing to do but hope and pray
For over a year it has been this way
Awaiting his return

She listens and looks for a sign to show
That he is home and she will know
He'll keep her heart from sinking low
Awaiting his return

No clicks of horses' hooves are heard
No nearby neighbor brings the word
She begins to feel her hope absurd
Awaiting his return

Papers filled with news of the war
Things seem worse than they were before
From her eyes the tears do pour
Awaiting his return

Another year has come and past
Forever his absence seems to last
Her fading faith is falling fast
Awaiting his return

Then one day the world fades from sight
And he is there waiting in the light
She holds him close with all her might
No longer awaiting his return

Elyse


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1 posted 2007-01-29 08:59 AM


Elyse~
Welcome to the poetic portals of PiP~

Intriguing penning .. hope to see more of your ink~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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stargal
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2 posted 2007-01-29 02:26 PM


Hey lemonraindrops,

Welcome to the teen forum of passions! What an interesting poem, I'm glad that I didn't miss reading this one. The ending was beautiful in the way that you could interpret it to mean different things. Thanks for sharing, I look forward to reading more of your work

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino            @-->---

icequeen
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3 posted 2007-01-29 06:48 PM


Welcome to PiP, my creative darling girl ~~ I am so glad you joined so that you can share your talent. I know you will enjoy it here, as the people at PiP are of the best in the world, not only as poets, but as kind and caring souls.

And of course, you already know how much I love this work of yours

He who wants a rose must respect the thorn.
- Persian Proverb

lemonraindrops
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4 posted 2007-01-29 06:57 PM


Thanks so much everyone I'm sure it will be oodles of fun. I adore writing.
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5 posted 2007-01-29 11:54 PM


Great first post and Welcome to Passions. this was a very sad poem with a sweet ending...
hunnie

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lemonraindrops
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6 posted 2007-01-30 09:57 PM


Very grateful for compliments =)
the_girl_next_door
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7 posted 2007-01-30 10:45 PM


Welcome to pip!! I loved this.. so beautiful. I love how you repeated the last line of each stanza till the end which also happened to be your title. Amazing job. Hope to read more.. keep posting.

~heather~

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

rhia_5779
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8 posted 2007-01-31 02:16 PM


Welcome to PiP and I like the last stanza
lemonraindrops
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9 posted 2007-01-31 09:45 PM


Much Love All!

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