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Teen Poetry #8
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Amaya
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since 2007-01-23
Posts 10
Mississippi
0 posted 2007-01-23 11:37 PM


Wanting

I close my eyes slowly,
Trying hard not to think of him.
But I feel it is very to late,
I can feel my body givin in.

I don't think he realizes,
How much I want his warm touch
Or that inside,
It's killing me so much.

Does he even know,
that he lies within my mind
Or when I'm doing nothing at all
I daydream about him all the time

I'm needing
I'm wanting
I'm pleading
I'm screaming

Then without even thinking,
I sit there and start to laugh.
A tearful heart felt laugh
Cause what I want I cannot have.

Let me know, when I've waken up
Because this ache is hurting me so much
Let me know when my dreams disappear
So I can determine what is finally rea
© Copyright 2007 Amaya -age 16 - All Rights Reserved
rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334
California
1 posted 2007-01-24 09:58 AM

I like the last stanza, satrical yet good.. Nice write.

I like this piece..Excited to see more
Amaya
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since 2007-01-23
Posts 10
Mississippi
2 posted 2007-01-24 08:06 PM

Thank you
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3 posted 2007-01-25 12:24 PM

I really loved this. have not seen your work before so Welcome to Passions hope to read more and like Rhia I liked the last stanza the best...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~
Amaya
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since 2007-01-23
Posts 10
Mississippi
4 posted 2007-02-03 01:09 AM

Thanks again and I will put more up, evenutally.

Let me know when I'm finally apart of this group
So I won't be the one looking like a fool
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