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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2007-01-18 10:53 PM


it hurts that you daon't say hi anymore,
but I don't stop you from walking I know the score,

It hurts to know I let you go,
I have nothing left not even my pride to show,

It hurts to know I love you still,
but i'll walk away, I know the drill,

maybe one day we can be friends one more time,
I might still love you but that isn't a crime.


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buttercupbaby
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outside in the rain
1 posted 2007-01-19 12:15 PM


Hola Hunnie!

i must say i can defiantly relate to this poem...don't we all usually say that? but i really do relate to this..saddly. I know the feeling, and you put it into words for both of us[probably more] which is miraculous!!!

I do like this poem, it's kind of like a really short story....=] BUT i can say this is not my favorite of yours,and i don't understand a few of the words you used to make others rhyme.. but i still like it!

-missy

wwzwlmd8
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since 2006-09-23
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2 posted 2007-01-22 08:39 PM


I liked I not the best but It was good and don't stop doing what you do best.
wwzwlmd!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


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