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The Day I Am Enlightened (Sadest Poem I Have Ever Written)
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The Day I Am Enlightened (Sadest Poem I Have Ever Written) |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia 
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First off I'd just like to say a huge thank you to all the poets here on PIP that have read my work over the year that i have been here... This i believe is my saddest poem yet.. I'm still crying now after reading it again, maybe that because it means a lot to me... I don't expect you all to feel pity for me.. feel what you like.. I would also like to say sorry to the mods for me being stubborn over the past few weeks... i guess we all get a bit pig-headed at times... Anyway onto the poem.. Hope You All Enjoy... The Day I Am Enlightened Why do you keep doing these things I have no idea, I love you with my entire heart but I get scared whenever you are near It’s like I know you’re waiting to strike at me with all your strength and might Waiting to grab at my arms and firmly hold them tight I’m crying my heart out, searching for a cure I used to think you’d never hurt me but now I’m not so sure I sit here hoping that your anger will fade away into the night But I know it won’t be going anywhere and nobody can help me escape this fright You’re so strong and so immature and I pray that you will stop Stop this anger and control yourself before in hell you make me rot I listen to my heart hoping there is a conclusion to this situation But I know deep down you won’t lower your guard and destroy your reputation Mum is slowly dying, a few years they say But you don’t really care as long as you get your own way Please don’t hurt me I need to stay with her forever I can’t let her go I love her too much and we need to get through this together Dad can’t handle you anymore you stand over us all A thirteen year old boy who is over 6 feet tall I’m your big sister and I’m too scared to say boo I know you don’t want to hurt us, well at least I don’t think you do Tonight I lower my head and pray That we will find a cure and mum can stay I know life wasn’t made to be easy but maybe it is fate First mum is sick and now you’re acting out and this is what I hate I hate waking up being afraid today’s the day you hit me The day when life gets hard for you and anger is all you see Somebody please help me I’m so frightened I’m scared that this will be the day in which I am enlightened The day that I fall victim to the brother I love the most For he is slowly killing me and I know that I’m toast Written By Jessica Wilton (RevengeIsMine) on the saddest day of her life... |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
honey you need to tell someone there what is going on in your family, in your life...your brother needs to get help. He needs someone to talk to, and so do you. I'm so sorry for all that you are going through. Please tell someone there that can help you...  |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
If you need to talk you can always email me .. I think you have my email.... Good poem by the way..sadd |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
if you EVER need to talk about any of this please let me know! [you could email me at buttercupbaby14@gmail.com i guess..] because i really do care about you! I know you must be going through an extremely hard time, ive dealt with people like this through my life b/c i know numerous families and part of my family that gets foster/adoption kids all the time..and it just kills me to know that people go through this. If you EVER want to get help for your brother[which i must say is the right thing to do, you could be in serious danger and he needs you to care enough to get help..] you could either dial your operator or go to the phone book and look up help lines, or teenhelp lines..they are there ive done it before..its the hardest thing you will ever have to do, unless you don't do it. I must say this is an amazing poem though..i could just see the tears and pain you were feeling..you really put your whole heart and soul into this, i must commend you for that..it was breathtakingly good but painful for the reader and most defiantly you... i will keep you in my prayers RIM...know that we do care about you here! love,<>< -marisa |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
sorry i had to reply again so i could add you as a poet in my library!  |
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WaterFairy103 Member
since 2006-05-31
Posts 196 |
Well, I know by now this may sound a bit redundant, but if you need to talk I've always got time (WaterFairy103@gmail.com). Very nicely written, and though I'm sorry about it I love the emotion. Good job, and don't be afraid to ask for help! Dance like nobody's watching, |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
i cant believe i missed this. way too emotional for me jess. seriously. this is truly one of the greatest pieces ever, and the sadest. |
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BeyaK Member
since 2008-08-07
Posts 126Philippines |
this is such an emotional piece i'd say... i do hope things went well this time on u with ur family. ~~*K. B.*~~ |
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RevengeIsMine Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820Australia |
Thankyou guys..., |
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Just.Another.Falling.Star Member
since 2008-05-08
Posts 422Canada |
this is incredible. and i can see how this is your saddest poem. your title caught my eye and i had to read it. i know that everyone is saying this...but please please please tell someone. i'm open for anything you have to say, i've heard alot from people and i can hanle more. this was a great poem...keep up the incredible work, and hold in there, you will make it through this, i know you will. prayin for ya. (library) ~*Julianna*~ |
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I am the arch angel Member
since 2008-02-02
Posts 167nowhere,illinois,USA |
Jess, its allready been said but i may only be thirteen and you may be alot older than i am. but i'm still here every day or night and every moment i talk to anyone here on pip. i feel like i have family. you. were the first to greet me when i was alone and a newbie poetry writer,i still am and never will compare to what you can write and have written. you are my big sister. maybe not genetically but you act like it and i look up to you everyday and i am protected. i know how they say older people are wiser...and thats true cuz ur very wise! but look at the newbies. we got help too. from the bottom of my heart, i love you jess! and i hope to see that this is over and done with soon. love, keagan If its at its worst don't stop believing, because I'm right here and I'm not leaving |
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hiddenIntheDark Junior Member
since 2008-08-27
Posts 20 |
wow, amazing poem, really sad. Sorry for what is going on in your family! |
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racer-boy New Member
since 2008-08-31
Posts 9united states, tx |
umm....your brother needs to seek some sort of counseling before he ends up doing some he'll regret. im here ne time u need to vent, i may be new to this forum but i plan on being here awhile. my e-mail is kevinhale350@yahoo.com, my shoulders are always available to cry on, that goes for everybody here. live now |
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YoungAmbition New Member
since 2008-09-03
Posts 7London Town! UK baby. |
A very emotional piece, something that both writer and reader can feel instantly. Critique aside, i hope your situation improves, you have talent and deserve to feel appreciated by your brother and secure in yourself. |
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