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Stunning Red
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mnelson07 New Member
since 2007-01-15
Posts 7Texas, USA |
First off, hello! My name is Michael and I've written a few poems and random rhymes here and there the past couple of years. I was searching for inspiration and found this website. So, as much as I look forward to reading some of everyone's work, I'd also like to share some of my poetry. Here's one I wrote about a crush I had two years ago: Stunning Red Between two red rivers is a face that I know. A face that is stunning, and radiantly glows. A face that is beautiful, the epitome of care. Is also extraordinary, sleek, and debonair. I stared into her eyes, apprehensive and scared. In blithe of sitting next to her, an admirer with care. She seems so flawless, so perfect and pure. The more I get to know her, the more my heart is sure. My breathe runs short, gentle yet steady. I want her with me, I know that I'm ready. |
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forever*wishing Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 178where my heart is |
WOW WOW WOW WWWOOOWWWW!!! that was SO amazing!!! i loved it!!!!great job, and welcome to pip! = ) not like i can really say that yet...im sorta still getting used to it...haha...anyways nice job ; ) ...oh, and texas rules!...even though i live in alabama now...im from texas...ok, nevermind...lOl |
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whitelielovely Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146Australia |
Wonderful poem, i bet you have a wonderful accent. i love texan accents. i have family in texas. but Welcome to PIP i love seeing new faces. it was a beautiful poem. enough to break any heart. "Love is when you tell a guy you like his shirt, then he wears it |
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mnelson07 New Member
since 2007-01-15
Posts 7Texas, USA |
Thanks for the compliments, this was one of my first and, in my opinion, one of my best poems. I'm betting it's because of all the emotion behind the words I glued together, who knows. But my poetry has changed quite a bit since then, considering I never got her and haven't had anyone since. Oh, and I actually don't have much of an accent at all, especially compared to some of the people around here, heh. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hi Michael, Welcome to the teen section of passions! It's wonderful seeing a new face here. I hope you enjoy the site as much as I have. This poem is amazing and one of the best that I've read on here in awhile. Your use of wording in this poem is beautiful and shows a wonderful vocabulary. I look forwarding to reading more of your work and seeing some of your newer stuff. Thanks for sharing  "I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->--- |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Nice rythmn and use of words. It didn't quite speak to me , it didn't seem to hav emotion to me. But I'm also drunk on exhaustion from school rite now. TExan accents are sooo cool. The new 6th grader at my school in italy has an awesome accent, megan she is soo cool. I luv her accent me and my neighbor can not get over it. |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
Wow! i havent taken an interest in any poems lately, but this one caught my eye and u did a superb job! im impressed : ) |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
welcome welcome welcome TO PIP! WOW THIS WAS AMAZING! you did an excellent job i must say! i just don't know what to say really except for this is going into my library and i absolutely LOVE IT!=] welcome again from us teens at pip[and everyone really]  hope you enjoy it as much as i know i do, and can't wait to read many more of your likely wonderful, marvelous, beautiful poetry!love<>< -missy |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
WElcome to pip |
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