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pen&paper
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0 posted 2007-01-12 03:14 PM



Phone ringing
Friend Answers
Talk
Laugh
Giggle
Hum
Sing
Cry
Tears
Laugh again
Giggle once more
All better
Love
Peace
Cherish
Friendship
Candie

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rhia_5779
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1 posted 2007-01-12 03:33 PM


THs isn't really a poem its more of words one word per line
pen&paper
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2 posted 2007-01-12 04:10 PM


who ever defined the structure of a poem?

stargal
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3 posted 2007-01-12 06:16 PM


Websters dictionary? lol...

It's an interesting idea, I don't like it as well as some of your other pieces but... Yes, it's interesting.

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino            @-->---

MixedChica
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4 posted 2007-01-13 12:51 PM


I acully kinda like it. Like its different and anything can be poetry. Yes its kinda different and a little strange but its simple. I like it. Creative.
rhia_5779
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5 posted 2007-01-13 05:04 AM


But to me it doesn't have any substance to it. It feels too simple too me.
pen&paper
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6 posted 2007-01-13 09:09 AM


don't just look at the words
listen to the story they tell

whitelielovely
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7 posted 2007-01-13 01:14 PM


i have a mixed opinion i think anything can be poetry- there is no definition but i also agree with what rhia said, it's a bit more smiple than i would have liked.
rhia_5779
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8 posted 2007-01-13 03:41 PM


It doesn't tell one to me, it needs more substance.
MixedChica
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9 posted 2007-01-13 07:02 PM


I think the words could've been picked alot better and if they were a little more complex it might of helped
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