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Hope_for_S0me
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since 2006-12-15
Posts 6


0 posted 2007-01-05 03:52 PM


A child's Toy

She Told me one day she loved me
I told her that back instantly
I was deceived, I tried straighting
that distorted image out, I lived
for her she almost killed me, by
leaving me behind to bite the dirt
hoping to be able to throw me away
like a child's toy that was broke.
But She came along and picked me up
repaired me and cleaned me making
me whole knowing my previous owner
had broken me. She is very gentle
never to break me, but to hold me
close in her embrace never to loosen
that lovely, dreamy, peaceful grip.
she broke me, but She Repaired me.

(There are 2 different shes you can tell by one "S" being capitalized and one being being lower cased, this is a friends poem about his Ex and his new Girl friend he asked me to post it knowing im into poetry, i told him i would and im gunna print him off the feed back when i get enough ^_^)  



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rhia_5779
Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334
California
1 posted 2007-01-05 05:06 PM


Fix the spelling and try describing this instead of telling it
whitelielovely
Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146
Australia
2 posted 2007-01-08 08:11 PM


hum, it's one of the most confusing peices i've read i followed along, but, it needs more specifics. no one will judge you here and if they are foolish enough to try thir oppinion shouldn't matter. tell us. use fake names if you must, but try to make it clearer.

-Lovely

"Love is when you tell a guy you like his shirt, then he wears it
everyday."

Noelle - age 7

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