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damo451
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since 2006-12-29
Posts 18
Western Australia

0 posted 2006-12-30 10:58 PM


This poem is about the time I was a little kid, and my mother finding the courage to fight back against my horrible step-father


The darkness closes in on me,
I shiver, shut my eyes.
He's coming in to get me now,
The one I so despise.

It was a mere two weeks ago,
I angered him again.
Had no idea what I did wrong,
Was only six back then.

He comes in with a wooden spoon,
An evil in his eyes.
Proceeds to hit me really hard,
Yet no one hears my cries.

My mother never said a word,
He frightened her as well.
I always used to pray for him
To go and rot in Hell.

The years went by and nothing changed,
He stuck to us like glue.
He used me like a stupid slave,
And locked me in the loo.

But then one day, that fateful day,
My mum just had enough.
She grabbed a broom and swung at him,
He thought he was so tough.

A rage I'd never seen before
Was flowing through her veins.
He couldn't win, she was too strong
She almost was insane.

And so he left, against his will,
The future now looked bright.
And now I stand up for myself,
She taught me how to fight.

~Damo~

© Copyright 2006 Damien Lee - All Rights Reserved
RevengeIsMine
Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia
1 posted 2006-12-30 11:12 PM


i LOVE THIS.... awesome write a fav of mine.... Well done...
RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia
2 posted 2006-12-30 11:12 PM


i LOVE THIS.... awesome write a fav of mine.... Well done...
Tee
Junior Member
since 2006-12-20
Posts 26
Belgium
3 posted 2006-12-30 11:49 PM


Amazing damo, realy love this poem. Can relate to it in every way. Hope your future looked bright afterall. Let past be past since it can't be undone.  

Feels odd though since I wrote a poem about the same topic a week ago
But I'm not here to compare, just to share, that I like yours alot

Keep up the amazing work!

broken_smile1469
Member
since 2006-07-02
Posts 104

4 posted 2006-12-31 12:39 PM


great poem... totally loved it
later

rhia_5779
Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334
California
5 posted 2006-12-31 08:36 PM


Wow you have talent in getting the wording and making it flow.  Very nice.. Love the last l in. i tied it al lin so well.

What about a diff title though?

like?
SHe taught  me how to fight

whitelielovely
Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146
Australia
6 posted 2007-01-01 07:51 PM


what a strong person. i hope to share in her strengh through my. . . trials. but enough about me- it was an amazing poem.

May you be able to with stand all evils to your ending day-

Lovely

"Love is when you tell a guy you like his shirt, then he wears it
everyday."

Noelle - age 7

hunnie_girl
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since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567
Canada
7 posted 2007-01-04 09:51 PM


Wow this was so touching, I can see where you're coming from. I love this.. going into my library
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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