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Tee
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since 2006-12-20
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Belgium

0 posted 2006-12-29 08:47 PM


Tears start to roll over my face
as I hold you in my arms, our last embrace
Memories of us enter my mind
I hold you tight
Oh girl, you are truely one of a kind

I will miss the love you gave me, it was so pure
Miss everything about you, that I know for sure
Your gentle touch, the way you walk and move your hips
I hold you tighter
Close my eyes, one final taste of your tender lips

The train arrives, It's time
For me to let you go, no longer are you mine
I try to grab your hand, but you slip away
Leaving me all alone
With noone next to me, there to stay

Falling on my knees in the mids of the crowd
Looking at you entering the train, wanting to scream out loud
But no sound comes out, only tears
Leaving me shivvering on the ground
Afraid of the lonely feeling for the upcoming years

A loud crack in my heart as it breaks in two
Leaving only memories
Me and You


I don't wish to be everything to everyone, but I would like to be something to someone.

[This message has been edited by Tee (12-30-2006 01:51 PM).]

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damo451
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since 2006-12-29
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Western Australia
1 posted 2006-12-29 11:33 PM


I like this, it has a lot of feeling =D. Keep up the great work!
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2 posted 2007-01-02 12:36 PM


A loud crack in my heart as it breaks in two
Leaving only memories
Me and You~

Ending was very nicely put. I liked this Tee it has a beautiful story to it
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
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My own world
3 posted 2007-01-02 12:42 PM


this was one of my favorite poems i've read in a while. A nice fresh poem that the rhyming seemed to come naturally, as if a second thought rather than the main focus of the poem. I loved it. Great job!

AIM-beatufu1tragidy

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