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Tee
Junior Member
since 2006-12-20
Posts 26
Belgium

0 posted 2006-12-20 06:19 AM


Hi everyone, as you can see this is my first post & poem here. I've read some realy nice poems of members here and decided to post a poem I wrote myself.


I stare with my eyes wide open, I can not sleep
Thinking of a girl I've only just met
But already I share your pain, pain which I also once had
Even though I see no scars on you, I know your wounds are deep
I want to help you, but I get pushed away
Don't you trust me? Don't you want me to stay?
Are you that scared of being hurt?
Don't be, that's not what I want or wish for, you have my word
I'm just here to help and care
But you are simply not there

Some find you quiet and mystique
but they don't see what I see
or don't let you fully be
I see a girl, pure and unique
Since I not only see a beauty on the outside
but also on the inside
And that part of yourself you shouldn't need to hide
You shouldn't need to hide
I know you've been hurt before
and that you not seek for more
But don't forget there are some who care
about you, even if you are not there


I know the past can't be undone
nor can it be erased
learn from it or you'll be forever chased
and remember that also good things still can come
Smile and be happy like you were before
if not, I'll just have to write you some more...


(Wrote this poem for a girl a few months ago)

I hope you enjoy reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it.

I don't wish to be everything to everyone, but I would like to be something to someone.

© Copyright 2006 Tim - All Rights Reserved
hunnie_girl
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1 posted 2006-12-21 08:16 PM


wow this was an amazing first post and WELCOME TO PASSIONS i hope you have a good time reading and writing poems I thought this poem was very deep and full of emotions. I hope to read more poems soon...
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

whitelielovely
Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146
Australia
2 posted 2006-12-21 08:36 PM


welcome, did you write that to me?

lol jk. but it felt that way i had some one (i know you're not them b/c, well you couldn't be)say that to me. i love your stuff it's nice to have a guy to chat with on here. welcome to passions, i'm pretty new myself. looking forward to more.

-Lovely

"Love is when you tell a guy you like his shirt, then he wears it
everyday."

Noelle - age 7

DucksCanFly
Junior Member
since 2006-12-20
Posts 20

3 posted 2006-12-22 08:15 AM


Wow, that was a really great poem, I really enjoyed it. I've felt the same about someone close to me and it also reminds me of myself.
Hope to see some more of your poems soon

Tee
Junior Member
since 2006-12-20
Posts 26
Belgium
4 posted 2006-12-22 01:28 PM


Thanks for the warm welcome and the positive comments . Sadly all my other poems Ive written so far are in dutch while this poem was my first english one, but definatly not my last since these comments do motivate me to write more.

whitelielovely: if the poem made you feel better I'd say yes

I don't wish to be everything to everyone, but I would like to be something to someone.

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